Talk:Great Darktonian Pie War
- 1 Insulting?
- 2 Thank You, Everyone!
- 3 I feel neglected...
- 4 MERGER
- 5 How do you defeat a magma puffle?
- 6 HP Dialouge
- 7 Wait
- 8 My idea for Tails6000's entrance for the war
- 9 Plot
- 10 United Penguin's Republic in war
- 11 Entrance for Kwiksilver PLUS the defeat of the Magma Puffle
- 12 Mr. Reviewer
- 13 Idea for the Epilouge
- 14 Hey!
- 15 My idea For the transformation of Luce
- 16 Happyface?
- 17 Chapter Eleven
- 18 Darktan takes over The Leader
- 19 The Riddle of Saint Finwe
- 20 HALT PRODUCTION!
- 21 Charades
- 22 The pics.....
- 23 This must be restored!
- 24 HALLEHLUJAH!
- 25 Plot Structure?
- 26 Nummy Cakes
- 27 I believe......
- 28 Zombies?
- 29 Confusion
- 30 Am I allowed to have Kwiksilver almost die?
- 31 I'm still confused.
- 32 My Part?
- 33 Idea for the end of the story.......
- 34 What about SPC?
- 35 Included
- 36 Major Plot Holes
- 37 Plot Holes ideas
- 38 How Chub 777 enters
- 39 Willy the Penguin's role
- 40 how can coool31 enter this war
- 41 This article...
- 42 Dan
- 43 Wannabe masters
- 44 Themes for both sides
- 45 WE NEED A REVIVAL
- 46 simple test
- 47 Plot
- 48 Request for Adoption
- 49 Archive?
- 50 Idea
...I never could write battle articles.
I guarentee a happy ending.
--कछुए मशरूम! Jesus Loves You and Died for You!! :) :) Absoulte Energie, der gefürchtete Schildkröte-Pilz, Diktator der Penguin-Enzyklopädie 21:37, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
I shall use this (maybe) in a future sequel to QFTGW. But right now it seems awkward... I mean, a battle right smack-dab in the middle of the USA? It's unfitting for a happy country. L8er... maybe. Explorer 767 (This is your Co-Webmaster speaking!) 22:47, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
Don't forget me! I joined Darktan too! --Marx
Hey, I have an idea! In the next day of battle, the arctic terns arrive on a powerful cold front, which they use to dramatically lower visibility on Darktan's lines (the cold front comes with fog, blizzards, and hail). They also bring out their confectionery-styled weapons, including brownie ballistas, truffle trebuchets, bubblegum bazookas, licorice arrows, candy cane javelins, and jawbreaker cannons. The Air Force of Ternville participates in the battle as well. Explorer 767 (This is your Co-Webmaster speaking!) 23:24, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
Wow this has a lot of action I wanna get in the action! And my character brings the sling shot and hot sauce machinge gun for battle. user: Tails6000
Thank You, Everyone!
I was planning, at the very end, for the forces of evil to be comedically defeated by a mass singing of "Peanut Butter Jelly Time"... but I don't know how to write that in the way the story is heading. It was heading better than anything I could have ever dreamed of!
To everyone who has been writing this, thank you!
However, I still want to end with a PBJT singing... but we don't have to. I would like to, but we'll have to wait and see.
PogoPunk, Explorer, and everyone else on the history of changes on this page, thank you! This article should be Featured very soon!
We have to wrap it up in a few weeks, though! Then we'll have to rewrite Darktan's article.
Finally, if Darktan defects to the side of Good, what could an all-powerful appirition do for the benefit of Society?
There's still a lot of work to be done!
--† कछुए मशरूम! Jesus Loves You and Died for You!! † :) :) Absoulte Energie, der gefürchtete Schildkröte-Pilz, Diktator der Penguin-Enzyklopädie † 20:55, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
You don't need to rewrite the Darktan article, just make a "Good Darktan" article.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 03:43, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
I feel neglected...
I was planning for a spectacular ending with the terns' cold front forcing the baddies to march on South Pole City... and Triskelle returning and rallying the civilians to operate South Pole City's ancient, hidden artillery (dating back to Olde Antarctica)... and the crossfire between South pole City and Ternville wiping out most of Darktan's army.... from there, the story would have been all yours. I feel really neglected now. I hope you won't mind me doing this, but I am replacing all the text from the Billy Mays thing onward; I am rewriting the whole ending. If you like my version, then keep it like it is, if not, then revert me. Explorer 767 (This is your Co-Webmaster speaking!) 21:42, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
At the end of my version I will leave only WitchyPenguin, Darktan, and a few others standing. That's when you guys can take over. Explorer 767 (This is your Co-Webmaster speaking!) 21:44, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
I had planned an ending and such. I feel kinda neglected about this too. I will write my version, just to show you how it would have ended.
So am I my character isn't in the action! someone add me to the fight please.
Quite the contrary
In my version, at the end it was written that Darktan was ready to fight again. I had a feeling that a few people wanted their own version of an ending so I continued the plot on. Darktan was revived, he wanted to fight, why not continue your stories off that? File:PogoPunk32.png (Talk to me!)
The ending of my ending is fully compatible with your ending. Darktan is left standing at the end of my ending, so you can then introduce the "real" evil after my Ternville/South Pole City crossfire. Don't worry, I think you'll like my ending. Explorer 767 (This is your Co-Webmaster speaking!) 01:59, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
I don't mind whatever ending you and Triskelle choose, as long as Darktan doesn't get caught by PSA/Go to jail or something similar. Besides, if he went to jail, he could bust out quite easily =P File:PogoPunk32.png (Talk to me!)
Why don't we merge all three?! THAT WOULD BE SWEET!
Here's my thoughts. So, we start with the Air Force in Explorer's theory, following by a spectacular return of Triskelle, as Triskelle should get. Soon after, in a touching scene, Shroomsky apologizes and returns the crown.
NEXT, as Explorer stated, Darktan, Marx Marx, Carl Marx, ACP, and everyone else on the side of Evil push back the forces of Good to South Pole City, where they attempt to capture it.
There, as stated, someone will rally the civillians to operate some old timey (and I presume comedical) contraptions stored in vintage vaults.
After wiping out much of the army, we'll reinstall PogoPunk's dramatic Keeper Battle.
The "true evil", the plant in the head, the reverted stuff (already written) and so forth will be reinstalled with it.
The ENTIRE battle concludes with, hopefully (in my dreams), a mass singing of Peanut Butter Jelly Time, in which Darktan and the Evil surrender. Though, this is optional.
From there, Triskelle and PogoPunk will wrap up with a dramatic ending.
Oh, and Tails, you'll clobber several ACP leaders with a slingshot.
Mergers: the best parts of the Wiki!
--† कछुए मशरूम! Jesus Loves You and Died for You!! † :) :) Absoulte Energie, der gefürchtete Schildkröte-Pilz, Diktator der Penguin-Enzyklopädie † 18:12, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
Great idea TS. Also, may I suggest that someone writes about the characters in Darktan's Army? You'll find I made a template for all the members of Darktan's Army, have a look at it here File:PogoPunk32.png (Talk to me!)
WOOOO!!!!!! SLINGSHOT!!!!!! Tails
Ok, here's my ending:
Air Force of Ternville appears and starts shooting down Darktan's army with random stationery objects, ranging from large pens and pencils to . They cut Darktan's army down by 14%, but 'tis not enough. Mayor McFlapp then orders the Ternville division of the Army of Eastshield to start shooting the baddies with confectionery as well. Huge brownies, enormous truffles, licorice spears and pelting jawbreakers (I mean beakbreakers) take down a further 37% of his army. Add this to the new 150,000 pies that have just been baked in Ternville's finest bakery and what do you get? A "fall-back" from Darktan's army. The baddies attempt to march on the nearby South Pole City, which is seemingly undefended with all the National Guard gone. Or so the baddies think. Triskelle returns, with the help of Mayor McFlapp, and together they rally the South Pole-ers to bring out the very ancient artillery hidden away in the South Pole City cellars. The ammo is hidden in a very secret compartment in the Capitol; it is a secret not even the South Pole Council know about. Together, the crossfire between Ternville and South Pole City wipes out almost all of Darktan's army. Only Darktan himself and a few other of his arch-minions are left standing. That is where you all take over. Professor Shroomsky can give the crown back to Triskelle, then POGOPUNK can go for the "real" evil thingy ending after that. At the end, Darktan tells the good guys that the only thing that can destroy the Shadow Amulet and its powers is to make the Silmaril crown shoot a wonderful beam of light by singing Peanut Butter Jelly TIme. A mass recital of the rap song follows, and the Shadow Amulet is sent into a void, which is later explained as linking this universe to the universe of Redwall across the FOurth Wall. I can do a little "epilogue" where the Amulet falls into the rafters of Redwall Abbey, if you want. Explorer 767 (This is your Co-Webmaster speaking!) 22:56, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
Here's the ending if I was gonna post it
Then after Darktan saw most of his army was down he had an Idea to raid south pole city. Then they went to the city then Triskelle had an idea.Triskelle said for everyone to go to the secret spot with the artillery and then after the strikes the only way to destroy the shadow amulet was the song of peanut butter jelly time. Then everyone sang the song and a beam from the crown sucked the amulet in the void. And the ACP keaders tried to escape. I got this Tails said with anger and then he destroyed them with a sling shot barge the end!
How was that? User:Tails6000
Great ideas, except I have just one teenie problem;
- The Shadow Amulet mustn't get lost, or be sucked into a void. If it does, it must be returned to Darktan in some form of epilogue. Darktan will always carry it, no matter what.
- Umm..Hello?I created Vesper to be a good shadow keeper!! --Triskelle3 ɹǝsol ɐ ɹnoʎ uǝɥʇ sıɥʇ pɐǝɹ uɐɔ noʎ ɟı 17:40, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
Wait a second.....there is no March 30 this year, when that battle was supposed to take place. Interesting..... [:-)--Lovebirds211 15:22, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
It is not good or bad. It is how the keeper chooses to use it's powers.
Good point on the epilouge I have to add my character in the battle soon all he is doing now is playing go fish with the vibration monarch for no reason! (shows them playing go fish five weeks ago) That long! Tails6000
It's good but can Kwiksilver be in it? Don't make him look like a complete idiot, though. Maybe he lays waste to a couple of Darktan's ranks with his Banana Blaster, maybe he and Sprocket knock Darktan over with a blast of fruit. Just please make him not look like a wimp? Make him a hero, if you please.Thanx in advance. -Kwiksilver 05:22, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
Okay...Kwiksilver and Sprocket were already in the Capture Darktan program, but just to be safe, I've put my user on as well. I am now asking again. See the above comment^-Kwiksilver 07:37, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
How do you defeat a magma puffle?
Wait on, I just had a brainwave. If one banana blaster can defeat a lava puffle, what could a THOUSAND banana blasters do to a Magma Puffle? After all, the magma puffle is only the higher version of a lava puffles. Maybe everbody could get banana blasters and splatter the magma puffle. The blasters would turn the puffle banana-flavoured and it gets defeated when everybody licks it. The saliva from the licks melt the puffle! That's just an extra idea I had.-Kwiksilver 01:29, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
I got one too! If I got water balloons,equiped my slingshot with 'em and attacked the magma puffle they'd get burned out! thats plain perfect! Magma is put out by water!
There's only one problem with that. If it got splattered with a Banana Blaster it would just simply melt into magma (wich could cause even more trouble) and then reform again. It said in the Banana Blaster article. Speeddasher
Yes, but notice that's for LAVA PUFFLES. And that's only ONE blaster. If a THOUSAND opened fire at one time, the magma puffle would turn into yellow banana goop. That way, even if it didn't melt it, it's attacks would not be harmful. Plus, the banana goop would be wet, thus extinguishing the magma puffle.
And hey, at the end of the war, the magma puffle can serve banana milkshakes!-Kwiksilver 02:28, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
Guys I got a friend from another world as well say hello to Mr.L!
Mr.L:Hey it is I Mr.L! I got a huge plan to destroy this Darktan fool When Tails6000 gives the signal I come in with my brobot L-type! then I swat most away and then Darktan then phorphets and cries home like a teensy weensy baby! hahahhaa!
Mr.L and Tails6000
Guys heres another Idea for the fight! Maybe when Metal explorer and Tails6000 are in the middle of the arena they have a 1-on-1 duel like Tails6000 the Fighters (song: Tails6000 vs Krono) And then they are teleported to the giant wing so they wont get out during the battle its like a battle in the battle! And then Kwiksilver gets a camera and is flying on a tern for transport (no offense mayor mcflapp) And then the two are fighting and then after the battle they go back to the field. That a good Idea?
Triskelle, your editing and altering of the High Penguin's dialouge is INCREDIBLE!
It sounds so much better, much more epic!
I just wanted to congratulate your brilliance! I love reading the fancy and fantastically up-scale dialouge you type so well!
I just wanted to compliment your brilliance, Triskelle.
You are such a speech writer! Astounding!
Many thanks, Turtle of Mushroomshire.
--Triskelle3 02:49, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
The sillhouette I mentioned was you, Triskelle!
Oh. Well, this is Triskelle's part of view on that section.
--Triskelle3 02:33, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
Okay, I will keep it but push it farther back to make it more story-like. Someone add stuffing between the sillhouette thing and King Triskelle's talk.
I'll add more stuff in the middle between the two.
--Triskelle3 02:49, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
My idea for Tails6000's entrance for the war
This is the entrance for Tails6000 during my war it is like when The bad and good guys see an unknown airplane Tails jumps down lands and then goes trigger happy with his hot sauce machine gun! That or my other idea is mcflapp calls the airforce He needs Tails to enter with them and try to take them out on foot that good?
Tails may drive an airplane; I believe he is a superb pilot, wot!
I'll add Tails and the aeroplane between the two things me and explorer just wrote.
--Triskelle3 02:50, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
Okay thanks tyrisk and explorer User:Tails6000
Okay, so far we can get in with a mass reinforcement regiment coming from out of the blue. Tails rides with the Ternville Air Force, the High Penguins return, and Ninjahopper and his students cream STINC at Card-Jitsu. This will push the baddies back to South Pole City, where King Triskelle and Mayor McFlapp reappear with their newly invented kind of ammunition. There they show the citizens how to work the interesting, comic, hidden, and ancient weapons of the city. This cuts the army down to just Darktan and a few members of the Conclave of Evil. Eventually, all the Conclave besides WitchyPenguin is knocked out, and this is where POGOPUNK can go with his "real" evil thing with the plant in the head. Then WitchyPenguin can be furious that Darktan is turning to the good side, and then takes the Shadow Amulet for herself and transforms into the Maledict or whatever. The good guys, with advice from Darktan, then defeat the monster with a mass singing of PBJT, and Darktan is inducted into the USA Hall of Fame and is given back the Shadow Amulet. All is well, and Mayor McFlapp is proud of himself!
WitchyPenguin steals the show? I like the idea of that =P
What about the Brilliance? Should we scrap Luce if she isn't used? What about Opacus' and Finwe's returns?
--Triskelle3 03:13, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
Well whoever ends up with the Light Amulet transforms into the Brilliance, so Luce should be the one to battle it.
Maledict VS Brilliance, the final conflict of Good and Evil. Sounds pretty epic to me =P POGOPUNK32 03:15, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
It wouldn't be the final, though. Finwe and Opacus' propechies have yet to come true Unless they teach Darktan and Luce how, maybe?
--Triskelle3 03:16, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
I would assume Opacus gave his teachings to his predecessor, being Darktan. Once whoever transforms into the Maledict, everyone having no clue about what it is, Luce and tow should go to the High Penguin library to study about what the Maledict is, and how to counter it.
Also just a side note; Darktan should be the one to turn into the Maledict, since none of the other minions know how to use the Shadow Amulet. Maybe Darktan feels he has complete total control, then goes berserk betraying his minions and everything, then everyone unites to try subdue the beast. POGOPUNK32 03:19, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
--Triskelle3 03:21, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
I like the idea. Could I maybe appear in the story though with Ninjahopper, and could Tails battle Metal Explorer like he suggested? Also we still have to come up with a way to defeat the Magma Puffle. Speeddasher
NVM, I added myself in the story as an assistant of Ninjahopper (if that's okay). Also don't get rid of Metal Explorer yet. I have an idea to turn him into a maintenance bot after Tails defeats him (if Tails wants to). Speeddasher
Oh, and by the way, the only way to defeat a Magma Puffle is with a thousand Banana Blasters. Seriously.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 10:56, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
United Penguin's Republic in war
Leader here. We wish to help the good guys. If anyone disagrees, speek now. --The Leader 10:59, 28 March 2009 (UTC) PS:I really need to edit myself.
Entrance for Kwiksilver PLUS the defeat of the Magma Puffle
I have a way for Kwiksilver and Sprocket's entrance. The ground between the two armies breaks and a giant drilling machine (think Herbert's machine, but bigger) comes out. Silence falls over the armies. The door opens and a penguin dressed in a black tunic jumps out. A worn red beanie blackened with soot is on his head, and he's holding a Banana Blaster. A red puffle wearing a ninja mask sits on his shoulder. That's Kwiksilver and Sprocket. They explain they're late because it took so long to find the drilling machine and fix it. Banana Blasters are tossed out to the good side, and the command is given to open fire on the Magma Puffle. Thousands of streams of banana goop fly through the air and land on the Magma Puffle, and the blasts are absorbed. The Giant puffle suddenly turns bright yellow and falls backwards onto Darktan's army, knocking out a lot of soldiers. It's been knocked out by the high potassium content in the bananas, and is out for the count. Kwiksilver joins the battle with Sprocket, firing pies out of their blasters.
That's just my idea. It defeats the Magma Puffle. Can I put that into the story or does an admin have to?-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 11:12, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
I'll add that bit like Speeddasher did, and if you don't like it it can be deleted, but I think it's pretty good.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 11:16, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
Just read the whole story, and I like it so far! Personally, I'm looking forward to the conflict between Maledict and Brilliance, I'd love to see what you guys think of them! File:PogoPunk32.png (Talk to me!) 11:51, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
Me too, that's gonna be EPIC-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 11:53, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
Speeddasher I would be happy to defeat metal explorer so yes I want to defeat him!
Idea for the Epilouge
I had a cool Idea for the epilouge if we add one.
Darktan is now living peacefully in what is now the Province of Pastry and is run by the Str00dels. Manny Peng is put in jail while being taught by Mabel, and is set to stay there until he learns how to talk properly. Like Kwiksilver suggested, the Magma Puffle gets a job selling Banana Milkshakes and is actually quite happy. Metal Explorer is forced to work at Eastshield Fried Fish, after his battle with Tails, as a Janitor bot until he is old enough to retire. The USA is now a peaceful nation, and everything is back to the way it used to be. Speeddasher
Wonderful idea! YOu may add that after the story is finished!
Im still going to add High Penguins living peacefully, accepted by modern penguins.
--Triskelle3 15:31, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
I'm glad that you like it Explorer. Also I forgot to add that Billy Mays makes his own company, and Captain Str00del becomes a delegate for the South Pole Council. Speeddasher
What happened to my other weapons for South Pole City? I liked those; I want South Pole City's weapons to be more sophisticated, unique, and different from the other weapons! I will still add them.
Im adding them. I got to wait though. ITS EARTH HOUR! ALL APPLIANCES SHUT OFF! 16:30-17:30!
--Triskelle3 21:30, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
My idea For the transformation of Luce
Okay, so the Prophecy says Luce, Kwiksilver or The Kernel will stop Darktan, okay?
The readers think that Luce is going to transform, but PLOT TWIST!
Luce is in a chamber in South Pole City, looking for the instructions on how to transform into The Brilliance to defeat the Maledict. The Kernel is also down here, hiding from the battle. Kwiksilver drills through the chamber wall because he has received a message from Luce on the Psychic Paper. He explains to Luce that he has been hearing a strange beat in his head from the day he was born, but he forgot it. The Kernel makes him taste some Spicy Fried fish, and he remembers, and taps out the beat to Peanut Butter Jelly Time with his feet. Luce transforms into the Brilliance and back again. The beat triggers it. Finwe is accidently summoned to the chamber, and he tells Luce she has to find the HPC Swimming Pool water. They find it, but Kwiksilver trips, and splashes it over Luce-
I'll finish this later, I have to clean stuff.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 22:22, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
The vial of swimming pool liquid could be hidden in Mayor McFlapp's office. The Secretary of Magical Thing-a-majiggers, who is a High Penguin, could hide it in a secret vault so it would eventually be found by Saint Finwe, The Kernel, Luce, and Kwiksilver years later (she can break the Fourth Wall).
- No, the vial is in the Arda spirit oasis, and no one but High Penguins can enter there.--Triskelle3 03:34, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Yeah, that's a good idea.
So anyway, the Vial splashes over Saint Finwe, Luce, Kwiksilver and The Kernel. They combine to form A more Powerful Brilliance. Saint Finwe's knowledge, Luce's awesomeness, Kwiksilver's skill, and The kernel's courage join to make an ultimate being. Suddenly, all the Elemental Amulets start flashing, Even Darktan's, though he doesn't notice it. (Insert The ancient weapons scene here) Suddenly, A winged dragon of light flies over the battlefield.
That's my idea.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 00:55, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
I have an idea! Maybe we can have the ancient weapons first, then the Air Force, then the evil wipeout, then POGOPUNK's ending, then Darktan's turn to good! After that, WitchyPenguin gets mad and wants to Shadow AMulet for herself. She tranforms into the Maeldict, and that's when the Brilliance comes back to the battlefield!
Explorer, you're brilliant. Then the Maledict still manages to almost knock out the Brilliance. Explorer comes in, telling everybody to sing Peanut Butter Jelly Time, and The brilliance gets stronger. It subdues The Maledict, WitchyPenguin comes back, weakened, and with her memory wiped. The Shadow Amulet is given to Vesper, who somehow appeared on the field. Balance is restored to Antarctica. THE END. Do you like it?-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 01:06, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Duh, I like it! After that is Speeddasher's epilogue, and then we'll be done!
Yeah, but can't we make an exception? Let's say WitchyPenguin has been planning her takeover for ages. She's manipulated the Fourth Wall, telling it she's a true Keeper of the Shadow Amulet. Or maybe she's Darktan's cousin or Vesper's long-lost sister. It's a good idea!-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 03:14, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Later Note: Forget that. WitchyPenguin will transform anyway.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 03:34, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Okay fine, I've been planning to debut back my original articles (Robo-Gary, Herbert Horror, Sensei Wraith etc.) so I guess WitchyPenguin can have her spotlight. File:PogoPunk32.png (Talk to me!) 03:17, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
I don't know about the Witchy Penguin idea. It dosen't really fit in with the story. Speeddasher
--Triskelle3 03:32, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Its ok, Pogopunk said WitchyPenguin could just transform into the Maledict anyway. I don't want the story too complicated.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 03:31, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
I think it already is complicated lol
--Triskelle3 03:36, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Yeah, it sort of is, but anyway.
I think Mayor McFlapp's office is a good place for the Vial.
Okay, let's say there was no time to get to Arda, then they find out that Mayor McFlapp is actually keeping half the water for safekeeping, and that's where they go.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 03:40, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Where is he? --The FluffMiester 00:45, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Already fought. Read the whole thing.
--Triskelle3 03:21, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
What abwout mwy cwopy woo didnt wike wit?
Also we cwould hwave a sween where i bwelch dwown thwe scwool or the wail. And bwow away Mwabel thwat would bwe wawsome!
First of all, you aren't supposed to return. Second, the Narrator does not play discs or manages sound; the Master DJ does. Third, your breaking out of prison wouldn't be funny. A mob of Mwa-Mwa haters might get you.
No one liked your chapter Manny so I removed it. Also you won't be making a return. Speeddasher
Well me and my pals will escape!
I suggest that Manny Peng made the words above.
Well I thought his story was okay. He used proper English.
P.S. Nice picture Manny. Max 1537
You are kidding right? Also we can safely say Manny will not be escaping. Mayor McFlapp will make sure of that. Speeddasher
Yes, Mayor McFlapp hates Mwa Mwa Penguins, so he'd probably leave out any scripts stating that Manny escaped.
We could have a passage stating that he tried to escape, but Mayor McFlapp, or even Director Benny, stopped him.
Well a guess we could say I tried to escape.
Darktan takes over The Leader
Hey what if at one point Darktan takes over The Leader's body if you know what I mean. Or he says "Leader. I am your farther". That would cool but funny at the same time. And don't say that this is not Star Wars. --The Leader 16:53, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
The Riddle of Saint Finwe
Why don't we have St. Finwe cite a Redwall-eque riddle instead of just giving the location of the vials away to Luce, Kwiksilver, and the Kernel? I think it would make for a more exciting and mysterious story.
I agree. I've never read Redwall before, so I'll leave that to you.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 21:17, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
Let Triskelle decide. --Triskelle3 21:18, 11 April 2009 (UTC) Brother
Okay.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 21:20, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
Hello, Triskelle's brother here (the good one, not the vandal/spammer). Triskelle wants everyone to HALT PRODUCTION of this until he returns.
Thank you, Triskelle3's brotehr.
Sir yes sir! salutes
Tails6000 15:02, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
You couldn't force me to edit this page until he returns. Speeddasher
This is an executive order from a co-webmaster, Speeddasher! I don't see any reason why we shouldn't follow it!
No. I ment that I won't edit this page until he returns. Speeddasher
We have to do that charades thing once Triskelle is back. I plan to reveal Mayor McFlapp's "Narrator's Electric Guitar." By the way, the thing about the Chandra X-Ray Observatory...
Does anyone like the pics I made for the story? If not I can remove them, but if you do like them I'll take requests. Speeddasher
Awesome pics speed!!! really good I liked the one with Tails and metal explorer I got a idea maybe we could make the pic with Tails in his plane parachuting Tails6000 17:26, 26 April 2009 (UTC)
I'll try to make one like that. Also unless Triskelle returns we might have to rewrite some parts of the story. Speeddasher
Thanks speed Tails6000 17:30, 26 April 2009 (UTC)
Also for those who don't know, or say it's not appropriate for this wiki, the background used for the Tails vrs Metal Explorer pic is from Brawl. Speeddasher
Love the pics.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 20:47, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
I just hope he does return. Also I practicly remade Billy Mays, and I uploaded the Image so I should have some say in whether it gets deleted or not. Speeddasher
Also for those who want to see them here are the pics. Speeddasher
This must be restored!
If Triskelle dosen't want us to use his characters in this story than we can edit it. But I haven't helped edit this article with other editors to what it is now just to have it deleted. Speeddasher
I wish it could be back...but there's nothing we can do now.....-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 02:48, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
Without the amulets, only one of mine, Darktan has no powers, so yo cant really rewrite it. --Triskelle3 12:14, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
I restored this one for him!
I've just read Bugzy's thing. Where's it gonna lead? I'd like to know.
Speed, your pictures are brilliant. Could you draw one of The Magma Puffle being defeated by the banana blasters?
Also, I think we should make a plot structure so we know when certain parts of the story are going to happen. I'm still waiting for Darktan to transform so I can add the next bit of the Brilliance dragon part.
Can I suggest instead of Darktan recovering at the end of Pogopunk's Glorius Contribution, WitchyPenguin steals the show and becomes the Maledict? That would provide a lead up and a plot twist.
Please, anybody reply as soon as you can and tell me what you think.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 03:03, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
I'll try and do the pic Kwiksilver. Also I think Darktan should be the one who turns into the Maledict. He is after all, the one who Luce is supposed to defeat. Speeddasher
i would assume me and my boys go onto battlefield, then while everyones distracted from us, darktan goes maledict. Bugzy 04:31, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
Thanks Speed. You're right, Darktan should be the one to transform, but it's not only Luce who defeats him. All the candidates for The Prophecy become the Brilliance by the result of Kwiksilver's inability to catch things. See the Archived Inclusions section, The Transformation of Luce. And also, thanks Bugzy for letting me know. Cheers!-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 04:43, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
Also Kwiksilver, I made the picture you requested for the Magma Puffle. Go to the Pie War page if you want to check it out. Also since both Triskelle, and Pogopunk have kinda quit, could I write the scene when Darktan Transforms into the Maledict. Speeddasher
Actually, I included a plot twist within the story. Bugzy is actually working as a double agent for the side of Justice, in exchange for lotsa moolah (kindlky provided by Bugzy Fan #1, Explorer). Is that okay with you, Bugzy? Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 23:35, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
Speed, did anybody tell you you are an artistic genius?
I love the pic.
Explorer: What happens then?-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS 05:19, 3 May 2009 (UTC)
You could always use Nummy Cakes to defeat Mwa Mwa Penguins and turn them good! Of course, you'd have to buy it from me...
Boggards23 01:40, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
I believe we can add PogoPunk's Excellent Contribution to the story now. I've added a part to the story so it'll fit in. All we need to do is edit it abit, and it'll be perfect. Speeddasher
Err..... not yet. Bugzy's double agent plot isn't finished yet, and Darktan hasn't actually advanced on South Pole City. We need a near-loss at SPC that Bugzy prevents, eventually culminating in an epic win on the side of Justice. Then Dakrtan needs to turn into the Maledict and attack SPC. The Brilliance shows up and battles with Darktan. However, after a long struggle, the Maledict drains out the last of the Brilliance's energy, causing it to transform back into Luce, Kwik, and the Kernel. However, Mayor McFlapp football-esque throws a delete missile imported from Redlink Abbey to Luce, and she uses what little strength she has left to shoot the virtually indestructible missile at the Maledict. The missile survives a blazing-hot blast from the dragon, then impacts, causing the Maledict to transform back into an extremely weakened Darktan. With their leader under the weather, the baddies retreat under an immense crossfire between SPC and some new reinforcements -- the city of Ternville, which has just blown in on a swift trade wind! The crossfire destroys almost all of Darktan's army, and then PogoPunk epically reveals the real evil. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 01:27, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
Explorer I don't mean to be rude, but why do you allways remove everyones edits? Speeddasher
I like the scene, but it came way too early in the plot. Darktan needs to advance his army up to the city walls before a full-scale battle can erupt, and so far we're just beginning. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 01:59, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
Okay then. I'll rehost my edit when the time comes. Maybe we should try and get this story to around 25 chapters. Then it would be a really cool story. Speeddasher
No worries. Your scene will look "epicer" [sic] if it's surrounded by other epic scenes. I plan for a Bugzy-double-cross, Jerk Rap OWNage (complete with huge stereo speakers!), and a Giant Pen rampage. It's gonna be the most epic and hillarious battle evah! Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 02:06, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
A rampaging Giant Pen. I gotta draw a pic of that. Speeddasher
Thanks for telling me, Explorer. That was the plot structure I needed. I'll put my Got Pretzels? scene in the Archived Inclusions section. So, how does Bugzy reveal he is a double agent?-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS-All your base are belong to us. 02:14, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
I think we can add most of the archived inclusions even mine if you want to I liked the inclusions I hope you like mine. Tails6000 17:51, 13 May 2009 (UTC)
Me and TS had a long conversation about zombies in the pie war on the good side should we use it? Tails6000 01:27, 14 May 2009 (UTC)
Im confused; we have about twenty different plots and ideas going into it. What's happening right now? Can I add anything? If I did, would I screw up the plot? I'm confused.
--Triskelle3 01:28, 14 May 2009 (UTC)
Erg! I can't figure out what's going on, or what's going to go on, so I'm not writing this anymore.
--Triskelle3 13:23, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
I do agree we need to find some kind of plot for the rest of the story, but so far it's pretty good and just needs a few edits so everything will fit together. Also I think maybe we could add Tails contribution now. Tails gives them the Destruction Gems so they can teleport out of the Tardis. Speeddasher
I put the stuck in the TARDIS bit to explain the long pause up to the Maledict boss fight. Mayor McFlapp turns on the Lithium Improbability Drive to eliminate the last of Darktan's army, then the Time Lock lifts at an improbability rate of 29,6678,34,52,01 and they materialize in Mayor McFlapp's office. Continue with your story.-Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS-All your base are belong to us. 20:54, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
Whoa, hold it now! What about the attack on South Pole City? Darktan must fail in breaching the capital; the Maledict is his last resort. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 20:56, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
The Achron charades are HERE. Pogopunk's Glorius Contribution goes HERE. A third of faithful Evil soldiers follow Darktan to the Capital while the rest are eating. Darktan fires up his Keish gun to find it doesn't shoot. Bugzy reveals he has been working for Explorer and sabotaged the gun. The gun explodes in his face. Mayor McFlapp brings the Lithium Improbability Drive and turns it on, to find the battery has run out. Tails turns into his Hyper Form and channels his power into the LID, turning it on. Darktan's army turns into various things, including several salmon, crabs, tacos, and a small car. The TARDIS Time Lock is lifted, Luce goes to Ternville, gets the vial and transforms. Darktan's transformation starts here. Alon-zi!--Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS-All your base are belong to us. 21:08, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
Before Mayor McFlapp finds his LID (the Mayor is quite messy and unorganized), I'd like for there to be a battle between SPC and Darktan's small regiment. That way everyone can get his/her ideas into the SPC battle before we conclude. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 21:10, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
If I was secretly working for Explorer, you'd have to note in the story that Explorer paid me more money than Darktan. 03:19, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
Sounds good to me to. Could I maybe have another part in the story though like helping Tails, or dropping Card-Jitsu cards down from the plane for the good guys to use? Also I had an idea for the battle between the Maledict and the Brilliance. Speeddasher
Mmmm-hmmm. Explorer's richer than Darktan, plus he can get Mayor McFlapp to type some extra moolah into existence for him. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 19:56, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
Am I allowed to have Kwiksilver almost die?
I'm currently writing a section where Kwiksilver apparently dies because he was the shield between The Brilliance and The Maledict, but he's just alive. Darktan, uses his powers to summon a bowl of nachos, which wakes him up. This is Darktan's conversion to good. Am I allowed to do that? Just asking. -Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS-All your base are belong to us. 00:37, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
I don't see why not. Both The Magma Puffle, and Metal Explorer kinda died (the Magma Puffle was knocked out, and Metal Explorer was put offline) so it should be fine. Speeddasher
I'm still confused.
I will cease from what little parts I am writing; seeing as I won't be back for quite a long time. Please, someone, figure out a stable plotline. And I have a cure for OOC-ness on Luce. Just have someone say "LUCE! STOP WITH THE OLDE ANTARCTIC FANCY TALK!" to her, and she says "Sorry, I don't normally talk like this, just trying to make the story dramatic.."
--Triskelle3 01:16, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
- Write where you wish. --† कछुए मशरूम! Jesus Loves You and Died for You!! † :) :) DON'T YOU DARE QUIT BECAUSE OF WHAT I JUST TYPED!!!!!!!! † 17:00, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
Idea for the end of the story.......
I have an interesting idea for the end of the story, but it will involve someone dieing. We don't have to use it, but I just thought I'd post it here. Okay so here it is.
The Maledict and The Brilliance are now battling each other. Then The Maledict waps the Brilliance so hard with it's tail that the Kernel falls out of the combination. The Maledict then waps even harder and give the Brilliance a small cut. This causes Kwiksilver to fall out of the combination to, and now he has a slight wound. Luce is now just normal Luce again and the Maledict is about to destroy her. Then with the Amulet of Light, she shoots a beam almost a hot as the sun at the Maledict and it falls down. Then it's turns back into Darktan who imediatley gets up. Now he's turned good and uses the Shadow Amulet to heal a nearly dieing Kwikisilver. Then when they think ti's all over something happens. The power of the Light Amulet the Luce released caused the void where Opacus was trapped in to open up. Opacus then escapes and the remaining Darktonian Minions side with him, and they manage to steal the Amulet of Shadow. Luce stays behind to care for Darktan who is very exhausted, and the rest are led into battle by Triskelle. Triskelle and Opacus then face of with eachother, annd eventually Triskelle wins. He then grabs the Amulet, and orders the remaining to tie up Opacus. Then Triskelle somehow teleports them all to the place were the Shadow Amulet was created. He then claims that the only way to end the war is to destroy it. He let's go of it, but Opacus then breaks free and jumps in to grab it. He manages to toss it back up, but he falls into the lava and dies (we won't say any of the details though). The volcano then starts to erupt nd they quickly teleport a safe distance away from it. It then erupts and is destroyed, making it impossible to destroy the Amulet. They then all head back to the capital and start rebuilding it.
Well that's about it. I hope everyone likes it, but if they don't then we don't have to use it. --Speeddasher
I had another idea for the battle between the Brilliance and the Maledict. The Maledict overpowers the Brilliance and causes all three penguins to fall out of the combination. Mayor McFlapp returns from a scavenger hunt in his office, and throws a Deletion Missile (with launcher) at Luce. As the Maledict is about to finish the job, Luce catches the launcher and fires the Missile at the dragon. Since the mIssile is resistant to any blast (even magical ones), it is able to hit the Maledict and delete it. However, since Darktan is no ordinary penguin, the Missile just causes him to transofmr into an extremely weakened penguin. I'm not sure whether POGOPUNK's ending should be used or not, but the ending follows right after.
Pogopunk's ending should be used, but the difference is Tails steals the weird weed and consumes the power, but instead, turns him to Dark Tails. And mainly, only 2 people could attack him,Luce and Darktan, plus Tails was swift in the form so mainly they both got knocked out, but luce blasted a light from the amulet weakening him to normal state.
Yeah a weird idea yet cool. Tails6000 21:46, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
I like your ending Explorer, and yours to Tails. How about we include all of our endings. Here's how it could work. We use Pogopunks addition and edit it so that Dark Tails appears. Darktan wakes up and becomes evil once again and is chased all the way to South ole City and Transforms into the Maledicts. Meanwhile Luce, Kwiksilver, and The Kernel rush some place and Transform into the Brilliance only to find that the Maledict is at the battle. They rush to stop it and manage to put up a good fight, but The Maledict destroys the combination and prepares to kill Luce. Then the Deletion Missle comes and the Maledict is destroyed leaving Darktan very weak. He manages to save Kwiksilver though, and then Luce attempts to heal her father. Instead however the Beam from the Amulet of Light combines with the Shadow Amulet accidently and creates a dimensional rift to where Opacus resides and the Evil Penguin takes over South Pole City with the remainder of Darktan's Army. The Good Guys fight back the next day however and the battle is very costly. Many penguins are injured and Triskelle comes close to being killed by Opacus. Just as he's about to however Darktan appears just in time and shoots a beam of shadow at Opacus. The beam weakens Opacus enough so that Mayor McFlapp can delete him and that's exactly what happens. Just then however the disembodied Metal Explorer sends a broadcast from the Space Colony Aircraft saying he's using the Master Gem to power the Deletion Canon and destroy all of Antarctica. Fortunatley Speed and Tails arrive at the Aircraft using Destruction Contol and arrest the robot. Then we show the prolouge and the story ends. So what do ya think? --Speeddasher
Hello again, it's me, the meek and not famous me. I was just wondering if my character could be included in the ending. Just as a last minute hero. Nothing too big. He's not a very important character in anything, so you don't have to use him, or my idea. They're both pretty useless. --Screwball86 16:41, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
What about SPC?
I've noticed something. South Pole City was turned back into a war fortress and delayed Darktan's army, BUT WE NEVER HEAR OF THEM AGAIN!
What happened to them? The Darktonian army was supposed to fight a glorious battle against SPC and Ternville's air force, and now you're skipping to Darktan's secret weapon?
Plot hole. UBER-MAJOR plot hole. SPC has been neglected; this is a total retcon.
We need to stop adding on to the story and write what was left out. Darktan should use his secret weapon AFTER his army is defeated by SPC. Kwik already formulated an idea for the ending of the battle, where all but the most elite soldiers are turned into improbable things, but everyone ignored it. I think we should postpone writing work and write the Battle of South Pole City. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (The Nerd Quibbles On...) View this template 20:37, 25 August 2009 (UTC)
Hey, I was just wondering if I could be included in this project. Or at least have my character included in it. I'm not asking much, but you know this isn't vital, since you guys are so far into the story already and I'm still sorta the new guy. Please consider this. it'll be ok if you deny this request. (or rant) All right, that's about it. --Screwball86 17:52, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
Funny you should ask. I think I have an idea of how to fit you in the story. You see, I was going to add a part were Metal Explorer is up at the Aircraft about to fire the Deletion Canon on Antarctica when Tails6000 and Speeddasher stop him. Instead, since your character was apparently stuck on the Aircraft for some time, I could make you stop him instead. If you like the idea tell me. --Speeddasher
Yeah the part when he trys stealing the gem Fists,wings,kaylee, and omega try and stop him but forgot he could fly. Leaving them done for. Tails6000 21:31, September 5, 2009 (UTC)
Major Plot Holes
It has come to my attention that we are making heaps of plot holes. For Example, quoting Explorer:
"South Pole City was turned back into a war fortress and delayed Darktan's army, BUT WE NEVER HEAR OF THEM AGAIN!"
This is bad. VERY BAD.
Imagine, if a visitor stumbles across our site and looks at our Top Articles section. He/she sees the Pie War and thinks, wow, what an interesting name. Click. And what do they see?
A COMPLETE MESS OF WRITING WITH NO CONNECTIONS, HEAPS OF PLOT HOLES, ETC, ETC.
We need to stop writing about Darktan's secret weapon, and continue writing about the epic SPC battle. In addition, I say we make a PLAN. With my experience of life, which isn't much, I have realised everything needs a plan. Or it will fail.
What's your opinion on this?
Spot on! This is exactly the reason I've not wrote anything recently!
--Triskelle3 16:05, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
Plot Holes ideas
I agree with Kwiksilver and Explorer we need a plan for this. So, how about that we write the missing parts and then add them to where we think they should be. Is that good? --Screwball86 23:24, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
Screwball, I agree with you there. We'll be able to kepp what we have now, yet still add exstentsions to the already exsisting sections.--Tidalwave11, just surfing the waves, three times a week 23:38, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
I agree. If we want to continue a very major epic battle, we need to fill in the gaps first.--Chub777 09:43, 1 September 2009 (UTC)
Well, either now or when the plot holes get sealed, can Chub 777 enter the story like this: Note: It's something rough, not the actual thing.
Mayor Mcflap calls all avalable ROFLCOPTERCOPTER around Ternville. One of them has Chub on board headed for the capital. When the land on Ternville, he teams up with others then shoot pies, etc. And then he becomes a member of the Good Guys.
Well, I think it's good, but don't you think he would have already been a good guy? (Just so you people all know, I had Willy the penguin enter the story.) --Screwball86 12:30, 1 September 2009 (UTC)
Galactic Empire12, Tidalwave11, and The Leader are involved in the Defence of Ternville. Chub 777 can be part of the team. How about they some how meet up? Then, armoured Darktan shoots a massive cloud in the sky, carrying High Knights of Darkness and Abyss Knights. The four have to board the cloud, and somehow destroy it. In the end, they use vacume cleaners to suck it all up. I know it goes against the rules of science, but this Fanon, and anything can happan. Willy the Penguin can be involved in the sucking up of the cloud too. -- Firmato per Il Dirigente Conversazione verso Il Dirigente 13:46, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
Willy the penguin is allready involved in a part of the story. He takes down Metal Explorer at the Space Colony Aircraft when the robot tries to use the Deletion Canon. --Speeddasher
Willy's still going to be in the story right? --Screwball86 15:43, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
Oh good. --Screwball86 15:46, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
Ok, I'll write the part where The Leader, Tidalwave11, Galactic Empire12, and Chub 777 meet up, and destroy the cloud. -- Firmato per Il Dirigente Conversazione verso Il Dirigente 17:09, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
And I suppose I could write the Willy parts, but does anyone want to help me with them? --Screwball86 17:16, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
I was wondering, is it possible for Questionmrk2 and his puffles to be transported into this story via warp gate? My characters really would like to be in this. They haven't seen Darktan, ever, nor Shroomsky so they wouldn't know them, but Issacc could be expirimenting with some strange gems (Madness Rubies!) that would turn him powerful. Issacc teaches Puffle-Jitsu, read Lone Star. That will be all. -1337doom
I written the part where Chub 777 enters the war, and defends Ternville. I'll add it when I can. See it here. -- Firmato per Il Dirigente Conversazione verso Il Dirigente 20:08, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
Willy the Penguin's role
So, does anyone have any ideas for Willy the Penguin's entrance and role in the story? --Screwball86 20:24, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
how can coool31 enter this war
how can coool31 and the lsp enter this war
Is WAY too big. Can't you guys split it into, like 5 articles or something (It takes a long time to load and scroll down)
I am da bomb! 21:24, September 5, 2009 (UTC)
I agree... dividing it to chapters. It's making my PC really slow. Dancing Penguin http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/clubpenguin/images/6/6c/Smile_spin.gif (Talk!) 09:26, October 5, 2009 (UTC)
Is it to late for him to join in? -- Anniemoose98, I wish you a Merry Christmas (or a Happy Hannukkah or Kwanza!) 12:19, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
Can they be in it? Since they have a deparment of Uh-Oh they could help either Bearu of entropy or bearu of fiction. Would be funny seeing Zenny going "WERE ALL GONNA DIE! WERE GONNA GONNA BE ENSLAVED" then having a random nearby master sallping sense into him.
--I miss pufflezzz....(cry) 05:02, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
Themes for both sides
Well, after much deliberation, I picked theme songs (both from the Kirby series) for each side in the war. The Good Guys get an epic trance remix of King Dedede's Theme while the Darktonian Army has a remix of Marx's Theme.
Nice ides Explorer, but I plan a theme for the hyper affair 2.0. (the 2nd part with hyper Tails) I go with the theme of banjo-kazooie allstar from allstars racing, or chaos control from shadow the hedgehog. Tails6000 23:12, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
WE NEED A REVIVAL
This article needs to be finished, soon! We need to start writing more. But, quite frankly, the plot is very hard to follow and I have no clue what's going on. Perhaps if we cut out the unnessecary bits and establish the remainder of the plot, we could start up on it once more.
I think the only way to go would be to rewrite the story. Except, this time, actually plan out the story before we write it, and bar people from adding their crap in. Not to say that other people's contributions are bad, but we can't have forty seven million different stories-within-the-story. What say you?
- Agree, although now that I think about it; will people really take the time and effort to salvage the Great Darktonian Trainwreck? If that would happen then I'd take part in it. Zone 23:08, 9 March 2011 (UTC)
I'd be glad to help once we come up with a story. --Speeddasher
Backstory: Zlo Shroomsky sued King Triskelle for his crown, following a scandalous affair involving his species. This resulted in the mass exodus of High Penguins to Arda, the hidden ice-city. Meanwhile, the exiled High Penguin lord and former keeper, Darktan reappeared and began to wreak havoc across Antarctica.
Beginning: The story starts off with USA soldiers fighting Darktan, the battle beginning (obviously not in that order), etc. The teams are equally matched. THIS is where people can add their own fighting bits. The High Penguin and Freezelandian Armies are on their way, off recruiting more soldiers.
Middle: South Pole City is attacked, Freezelandian & HP armies arrive. Freezelandian Army goes to PBJT Valley, HP Army goes to SPC. Garment Army is summoned, Darktonians attack SPC, Giant Pen transformed, SPC’s defenses used, etc. Kwiksilver, Luce, and The Kernel go to get the Swimming Pool water from Mayor McFlapp’s office. Some parts of this can be free-add, but for the most part it to stay with the main storyline(s).
End: They get the water, Darktan transfigured, he attacks, so on and so forth, and attempts are made to fight him but to no avail. Luce transforms into the Brilliance and fights Darktan. She defeats him and he returns to his older form, Theangel Anator. He is forced to do community service. This punishment is light, because Luce vouched for him, since he is her father). Str00del Forced allotted the Province of Pastry. Elemental Amulets given to new owners, which were actually the old owners, who were living in Arda, and thus out-of-contact with Triskelle, who held the order together.
That is just my view on things, a brief overview. Obviously in the story there will be much more details! What do you think? Ideas are much appreciated. Can someone posst a link to this on the Sitenotice/main page? -- Triskelle3 Talk to me! 15:43, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
- I will post this on the sitenotice.
- Although I usually don't share my views, I have to admit, your idea works, rather then this messed up random crap.--Agent Johnson | I'm Brit-ish and cause of that, I'm Liberal. 19:28, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
Request for Adoption
I wish to adopt this article. It is old, outdated, full of plot holes, and hard-to-follow. I won't change it radically, just clean it up a bit. What say you?
Neutral - It needs a total rewrite. We all agreed on that however if we rewrite it to your view of the plot then I'll say yes.--Agent Johnson | I'm Brit-ish and cause of that, I'm Liberal. 14:10, 13 March 2011 (UTC)
Sure. I'm sure you'll do a great job with the article. --Speeddasher
I seriously hope somebody archived the old version of this, before the rewrite.--Kwiksilver - Drop it like it's hot while the pimp's in the crib. 09:46, 3 November 2012 (UTC)
What if manny returns and tells darktan that he is taking over and gets punted again