Talk:Shops Civil War

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Chill should ask me and then brook if we wanna be his VP. I could say no because i'm too busy with "stuff", and brook could suggest a whine to chill that Djf is the only government official who hasn't ben VP (or something of that nature), because the whole wheelchair/retarded thing you have going can only last for so long :S Cp kid Wanna Talk? 19:17, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

I was thinking Chill doesn't want a running mate, so Djf and Bro campaign but Djf wins. --FlagCanada.png Bro Talk to me! 19:41, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

LOL WHAAAAAAAT. Djf just visits brook in his JERDI cloaks and joins the dark side for some COOKIES?! LOL. Only problem is the horrible inaccuracy outmatches the funny-ness in it :S Cp kid Wanna Talk? 15:14, 8 June 2013 (UTC)

Also, I wanna use meh jedi mind trick in this story somewhere, so maybe that's how we get out of the zhouese prison thingy? :3 ALso for the record, I should be the only one able to use the jedi mind trick (don't teach that to zee other noobs). CKSig.pngWannaTalk? 03:55, 15 July 2013 (UTC)

WOAHHHHHH IDEAZ! I just thought of episode 1 when qui-gon met jar jar. Maybe us meeting chris could be like that- the Zhouese could be about to execute him for being silly (because silly and stupid ppl aren't allowed) so we save him :D (it would obviously be after i use meh jedi mind trick to get us free :P CKSig.pngWannaTalk? 03:55, 15 July 2013 (UTC)


  1. I already have the escape planned, and you're not credited for it.
  2. I have no idea what the Jerdi mind trick is.

--CanadaFlag.png Bro Talk to me! 03:57, 15 July 2013 (UTC)

Ok.
  1. You haven't credited me for anything.
  2. Look it up, it's pretty cool. "These are not the droids you are looking for" was kenobi using the mind trick.
  3. I was just trying to be helpful since you were complaining earlier that you had writers block.

CKSig.pngWannaTalk? 04:00, 15 July 2013 (UTC)

Lol when I meant you, I meant your character; he's not gonna be the one freeing you guys. --CanadaFlag.png Bro Talk to me! 04:02, 15 July 2013 (UTC)

What will happen in the end? --His Majesty Slenderman the White King (talk) 06:14, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Can you make me involved later in the story? Make my character to be just back from vacation at Pengu Town, Trans Antarctica and when he arrives, he freaks out when he sees what happend to Shops, and so he opens his backpack and takes some weapons he brought to protect himself in case of emergencies. Even later, he gets a lightsaber.

Or, if that's too OP Mary Sue, make me at first have only a gun and a wooden sword, and later during some battles, he gets given a lightsaber. -- Penstubal SerbiaFlag.png Forever Serbian! 17:46, 21 November 2013 (UTC)

AND if you can't do that either, can i just get involved and you write your own way? -- Penstubal SerbiaFlag.png Forever Serbian! 17:50, 21 November 2013 (UTC)

Oh, and why does Shops fall so early? Can't it fall somewhere around between 2035 - 2050? -- Penstubal SerbiaFlag.png Forever Serbian! 17:55, 21 November 2013 (UTC)

So can i or what? -- Penstubal SerbiaFlag.png Forever Serbian! 12:52, 23 November 2013 (UTC)

Writer's Block?[edit]

Did you just write the plot like this to continue the story without cool-ness? Like, what was the point of killing chris in front of everybody? I remember a long time ago I suggested a cool mystery where she killed chris and staged her own kidnapping which could've led to a cool battle between us all, but oh well :P Also, how is real-brook supposed to fend off against a lightning-wielding insane robo-brook? Btw just another idea, but since I'm a jedi and all I'm sure jedi are assisting with the war; some in jedi-only squads assigned by the temple and some jedi mixed into the USSI army (not publicly jedi, but they have keysabers and know how to use them :P) So the idea is that you could use them for help if you need more excitement with troop-troop battles with USSI v. Shoppers and drones. Regardless, i'm just trying to help by submitting ideas and feedback. CKSig.pngWannaTalk? 08:41, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

.....[edit]

Gary: *invents un-toxify machine and uses it on Lavender*

Lavender: *un-ages into his right-aged look , but his feathers turn white*

Gary: *invents non-toxic lavender paint and shoots it at Lavender with a paint gun*

you can add that somewhere lol

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Tenorio[edit]

“President Donal Tenorio of the USA was one of the first to respond when pressed about the issue“

Welp, you just jinxed us all. --SlenderXP Talk to me 13:08, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

y e s --Chill57181 (Talk - Contributions - My Articles) 16:39, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

So Megg's reign of terror doesn't last forever thank goodness. --Brant (Talk) (Contributions) 17:56, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Reviews[edit]

kast yuor wotes :D --CAN'DUH Bro Talk to me! OH YEEEEEEAH 20:51, 23 February 2019 (UTC)

Rate4Stars.png Good story, but has some flaws By Chill57181

Shops Civil War is a good and exciting story that provides closure to the history of Shops Island, but has a few flaws that hold it back and kind of bug me. Because the story took so long to make, the majority of the story is lower quality than the last couple of chapters, and I wouldn't be surprised if some details got lost in the shuffle.

Probably the biggest inconsistency in this story is the issue of the Force. In chapter 7, Penquino tells Chill, LMGT, and Brook that they aren't actually Force-sensitive, but scenes both before and after this line of dialogue show them using various Force powers. At the end of the story, it even says Brook joins the Jedi Order.

Another thing I didn't really care for was Djf's characterization. Princessius immediately turns Djf to the dark side with an offer of cookies (which let's be honest is probably just an excuse reason), which would indicate that these two aren't the most serious, but then spends the rest of the story depicting them as ruthless Sith. We all know Princessius is a master of manipulation filled with rage so he fits the bill, but it doesn't really seem to work with Djf's character. If the cookie scene didn't exist and Djf had a better reason for turning, this wouldn't really be an issue, but with its inclusion I think it would've fit better to portray at least Djf and possibly Princessius as incompetent bumblers, hanging on by the skin of their teeth with Swissius' help.

Speaking of characterization, I feel that Penquino, Chill, and LMGT have issues with their writing in the earlier chapters, which is a common issue in Bro's earlier works.

Despite these flaws, Shops Civil War is an enjoyable story overall, and I appreciate that Bro decided to return and finish it, giving closure to Shops' story and many of his characters.