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Hello, Explorer! I am expecting you to leave me a message of complaint, as usual.....


Welcome to my Talk Page. Please leave me a message at the bottom. Ill get to you as soon as possible.


In addition, I highly do not want inappropriate language on this page! NO EXCEPTIONS!!


Thank you!

--Swiss Ninja Come see me when you can! 02:51, December 11, 2009 (UTC)



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Hi, Swiss Ninja![edit]

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BOOYAH FOREVER!, -- Explorer 767 (Talk) 03:15, July 23, 2009

Im making a musical[edit]

about christmas, I would eb honored if swiss ninja and/or other charecters you control may be in it.Belinna singing would be....sweet and scary at the same time.....


--Corai was here 03:54, December 12, 2009 (UTC)

SN family[edit]

Okay, you told me that I shouldn't expand it more, but most of the articles are really stubby, so I think thay need to be expanded. If you aren't willing to expand yourself, I can help, just tell me what you want and I'll make up a backstory and stuff.


I'm especially looking at Ninja Wraith and Griante. Ps. Can I draw pictures of them? Just tell me what they look like.

Citcxirtcem 21:54, December 14, 2009 (UTC)

What about Ninja Wraith? Citcxirtcem 04:34, December 18, 2009 (UTC)

Okay[edit]

Well, can you at least tell me what they look like.

Ps. Is Griante the green kid in the royal family picture? Citcxirtcem 04:41, December 18, 2009 (UTC)

So... that green kid was NW. Where's Griante...? Anways, if that's the case, it can always be fixed.


Well[edit]

since you seem interested in Water Ninjas, maybe he could be a type of water warrior. I'm thinking that there could be a new one to the fish warrior known as the "reef" warrior, that have coral/starfish armor and weapons.

You didn't say anything about this, but maybe WN could be an "Echinoderm" warrior/ninja, since they have no face, like a wraith.

Citcxirtcem 05:07, December 18, 2009 (UTC)

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Your Amulets[edit]

They're not Artificial Amulets... are they? Anyways, I think we should put them in a new category, can call them the "Elements of Education" or something, and make a literature, Science, Social Studies, and other stuff like that Amulet.

Citcxirtcem 04:54, December 21, 2009 (UTC)

How[edit]

Can you think the universe is only 6,000 years old? --Unknown4 Talk 01:28, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

I Agree[edit]

But they need a army.

--Corai was here : [:-). 04:33, December 23, 2009 (UTC)

RE: CP[edit]

Nice try, Swiss, but that's just OOC. You can't just magically make CP separate from the USA; you didn't make it up. Canon is canon... Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (MERRY CHRISTMAS!) View this template 15:21, December 23, 2009 (UTC)


BTW, have you even listened to what HF and the other users have said about making CP a lone republic? It's not defendable. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (MERRY CHRISTMAS!) View this template 18:00, December 23, 2009 (UTC)

Merry Christmas![edit]

Merry Christmas!


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Dancing Penguin (Talk!) (Contribs) (Edits) 20:02, December 23, 2009 (UTC)

RE: Request[edit]

No. That's totally against canon and quite greedy (IMHO), I might add....

NOP[edit]

DONT YOU DARE! WE ALREADY SAID THE IDEA IS WORTHLESS, IF YOU DO ILL MAKE SURE YOU GET A WARNING! DONT EVEN THINK ABOUT IT SWISS!

--Corai was here : [:-). 00:52, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

ok........[edit]

but the second it seems useless im gonna make it how ti was before, or get a rollback to do it.

--Corai was here : [:-). 01:51, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

Cp as a republic[edit]

It's not practical. CP has no politics, army (Secret Agents are not soldiers), or major economic supplies. It will die as a country.

Benefits: NONE

And Exxy would just revert it back. Corai and I will be sure that while he's on vacation, you won't do anything crazy.

And if you're bored, you can read this.

Citcxirtcem 01:53, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

Actually...[edit]

I need to eavesdrop. I'm an admin. I need to know what is going on with the wiki and users.

Anyways, Club Penguin is supposed to be neutral on everything. Face it, people don't like how some canon articles are made, simple to put. If we give CP a certain form of politics, somebody is going to not like it, and want to change it. It's a part of Antarctica because it can't be on its own, and has been there for a while.

The only form of government CP could have is anarchy, and then it would die because of the lack of economy.

Citcxirtcem 02:07, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

No[edit]

and yes, Im neatral, im just making ti even for you both, so it has allies to help his ecomy and ect, and downsides, so its equal for both sides.

--Corai was here : [:-). 02:23, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

Moderators?[edit]

That's in-game.

And it can't be a republic, because it isn't a stated as a republic in the game. And it's probably OOC for Sensei to be a leader, just a teacher.

The Ninjas aren't enough to stop an invading force.

Rockhopper Island is deserted and Chi Con is for CP being a part of Antarctica.

Citcxirtcem 02:42, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

RE: CELEBRATE, EXPLORER'S LEAVING![edit]

I hate to crash the party, but no, I'm not leaving, especially after you left a nice little smug message on my talk (you can't possibly miss me THAT terribly).


Actually, I'm not leaving cuz my mom said I could just be less active instead of going to the extremes of the spectrum. I'll be doing maintenance work and passive editing.


Seriously, Swiss, I don't know how to put this to you. The entire community said a resounding no to your idea. All odds (and votes) are against your idea. It's not going to fly, and the community doesn't like it either. Please just stop. CP meets none of the requirements at its current state, and it could easily be deleted altogether with 15 KZT 9000 missiles. Not good. Just stop. The community says no. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (MERRY CHRISTMAS!) View this template 14:34, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

Swiss why are you so annoying?[edit]

Swiss if anyone needs to be good it's you. I honestly wish I didn't have to say this but I have to say the truth. Of all the editors that have come to this site, you are the worst so far.You're articles are bland, you annoy other users constantly, and you ignore direct warnings that you might get blocked and then after you do get blocked you whine to users like TS who take mercy on you (not making fun of TS because he's a good friend of mine). I'll admit, that time I banned you when you made your character Sensei's relative I was acting like a huge jerk. However you honestly seem to ask to be banned at times. You've given quite a few users like Happyface a bad name and the only reason you're still on this site is cause their are some users like your potential sockpuppet practically worship you. --Speeddasher

Ditto Speed. Your worse than a vandal. You BAAAAAW and want people to worship you. BTW "Jsu" literally worships you. --Happyface Merry Christmas!! 20:06, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

YOu dare[edit]

You now insult one of the best edittors ever after they quit! AND YOU DEFIE THERE WISHES! THAT IS A DISGRACE! If i was mena id make a hole award for disgrace, but im not so ill jsut say JO MAMMA IS A FICUS and leave, bye.

--Corai was here : [:-). 21:10, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

Wow[edit]

I now knw why you applied for b-crat ship. So you could do whatever you wanted and not worry about being banned/demoted. Of course your plan had flaws: You needed votes to become one, and wikia staff could demote you if you did anything crazy.

Anyways, I'm not for you quitting, but here's some advice: STAY THE HECK AWAY FROM EXISTING ARTICLES!

Make yourself useful and keep working on your Hochstadt Family, which has like 20 almost blank stubs, or the history of Club Penguin, like Um or the Babbelonian Empire with Leader. Just stick with those, and you'll get respect. Who knows, if you gain a little more common sense, your contributions on other articles may be looked up.

Citcxirtcem 20:26, December 27, 2009 (UTC)


Agreed --Corai was here : [:-). 20:27, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

re:...[edit]

Well, then how come there are so many stubs/LQAs?

And you wanted to make CP a free republic... SO YOU EVIL EMPIRE CAN INVADE IT AS A PART OF THEM BECAUSE IT'LL SUCK AS IT'S OWN COUNTRY! Just like in my story. Lol, jk.

Actually, I doubt that CP being a country or a hamlet would have a major effect in any of your stories. It'll have an effect on other people, but I bet you'll manage.

.......[edit]

Wow. You've really gone off the deep end, eh?


First you propose a crazy idea to the community (which rejects it with a resounding no), then you try to enforce it anyway, forcing me to protect the CP article for two days, and now you're actually DEMANDING us to make Club Penguin fulfill the requirements?


Swiss, please get your head out of the clouds. No one is going to do all the work of twisting canon for you, especially when they think your idea is bad anyway. You want to twist canon? It's impossible. Canon is infallible. I don't want you to invade CP, I (and most likely a lot of other users) want you to leave it alone. Just drop it. The community says no, I say no, canon says no, reason says no. How many "no"s does it take for you, Swiss? Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (MERRY CHRISTMAS!) View this template 22:01, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

...[edit]

If you never wanted Explorer to respond, you shouldn't have argued in that message.

Anyways, I think now you know that your idea is never going to make it, so goodbye.

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 22:11, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

RE: Deal[edit]

No. Seriously, Swiss, the community's already voted no, why trial it? Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (MERRY CHRISTMAS!) View this template 22:27, December 27, 2009 (UTC)


Seriously, even with a (small) chance that CP being a free republic "could work", it's just too impractical for many reasons. Yours "Falsely", Explorer 767 (HAPPY NEW YEAR! 2010 FTW!) View this template 02:31, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

RE: Movie[edit]

Actually my computer has crashed three times. I lost everything and then upgraded to Windows Seven (which is INCREDIBLE). Due to this, I no longer have Microsoft PowerPoint 2003 or Windows Movie Maker, two neccessary components to my videos. I've wanted to work on a clean This Land parody, but I can't, considering my circumstances.

Have a glorious day.


-- This is Serious Business! Jesus Loves You and Died for You!!  :)  :) Santa's in your room. 22:45, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

P.S.: One of your accomplaces, Jsud, I believe, was an Archduke. Sweet!

Swiss, keep asking and I'll change the Cookie War story so that every one of your cities are captured, and Swiss Ninja and his warriors become JAILED AND PRISONERS OF WAR! --Happyface Happy New Year! 02:38, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

No we can't[edit]

If you look at a canon map of CP, there's no ring of islands.

Either take out CP reference, or make it fictional.

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 02:39, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

Lol, what?[edit]

The Ring of Fire basically surround CP from a very far distance; the CP inhabitants cannot view it unless if they take a boat out to sea for about 20 miles. The islands of the Ring are very close together, and only one ship could pass through the gaps that separated them. Each island has a fiery volcano.

What exactly is the point of this?

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 02:43, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

Why[edit]

Would it need protection? The army of Antarctica and Chi Con will protect it from invading forces.

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 02:48, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

Exxy also said that[edit]

Club Penguin wasn't going to become a republic. Furthermore, a ring of islands cannot protect an island. Give it up, SN, or I'll make a blog on your behaviour.

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 02:52, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

Blog[edit]

I haven't made it yet, but if you continue to demand that Club Penguin be a free republic, I'll make a blog asking you to STAY THE OUT OF PRESENT ARTICLES, and work on the history of Antarctica and the Hochstadt Family's past lives and the math/language amulets.

It's for your own good. People don't want you here, and you trying to force CP into becoming a free republic will only make them like you less. Work on your existing articles, turn them into HQA, and then you will get the respect you deserve.

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 02:58, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

Are you serious?[edit]

Dude, where do you come from? Stupid is not an inapropriate word. Trust me Swiss, you do not want to know what I would've used to describe what I think of you. I'm gonna try and be the Happyface of this conversation. Get this ridiculous lord thing out of your head, and stop expecting everyone to scratch your back while they kiss pictures of you. That offense out of the way, I am sickened at what you said to Explorer. Let me try and explain something to you. Explorer has contributed more to this wiki than you would ever wish to and now he's semi-quit. And now you purposely defy his last wish! I'm seriously tired of you Swiss! I'm not gonna ban you (yet) becuase then you're gonna whine and you'll get put back on anyways. However you need to learn how to respect other users and learn that we are not your servants. And to be honest, you would make a terrible king in real life. --Speeddasher

So, um Swiss, I guess you know what to do now... Just ignore Speed, but still try to be rational, respectful, and go with the flow. Or you'll get more messages like that.

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 04:21, December 28, 2009 (UTC)

Is there an X Antibody for Swiss Ninja?[edit]

I wanna know because I am thinking about making an X Antibody for Swiss and he can be part of DTA.







--Flywish (Talk to me if you want something with any of my articles or If i got a special award)

X and the City[edit]

Swiss Ninja will be in that TV show and will voice himself in some episodes.

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 03:11, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

re:youthat's[edit]

That's your message? Seriously?

Oh, and you might want to check this

http://unclubpenguin.wikia.com/index.php?title=User_talk:Dancing_Penguin&diff=18010&oldid=17981

Citcxirtcem Talk to me please! see my 5,676 edits! 03:43, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

Actually[edit]

The Conclave of Doom is the successor to Darktan. Bellina, being a lesser Minion has a long way to go.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 20:24, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

Well[edit]

I'm sure that Ninja Wraith won't be surprised.

A good way to get her powerful would be to get her to become a conqueror like Swiss Ninja. Maybe she can assassinate Jessica to get the throne (I'm guessing that Griante is killed in a duel with NW).

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 21:35, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

ok[edit]

this my idea


Beofre any of us could drink the pail, dozens of Swiss Ninja's forces (nto swiss ninja) found them and attacked kncoking the pail away, after a logn snowball fight we reclaimed the pail and quickly dranked, but it was damaged ad the importality was weakend, we could sitll get hurt and sick but not killed.


Better idea IMHO

--I miss pufflezzz....(cry) 05:43, January 9, 2010 (UTC)

Defense[edit]

i see you cant udnertsand god modding

god modding is as simple as making your charecter have a huge army in 1 day. Importality is THE BIGGETS KIND OF GOD MODDING YOU CAN DO, i should know I USED TO RP IN A RP FORUM where they TAUGHT the meaning of god modding. If you ever went there you'd get 10 warnings in 1 hour if you pput fisch or swiss njnja in.

--I miss pufflezzz....(cry) 03:27, January 10, 2010 (UTC)


Swiss, the reason I nag you is because you put yourself in situations where I have to. I wouldn't mind of the immortality were only temporary, but permanent immortality, without being able to be hurt or anything? That's complete GodModding. I thought Fisch was a total n00b, not some invincible ninja who can walk on lava. I mean, seriously? Yours Truly, Explorer 767 (This is a link to my talk page. Go figure.) View this template 20:27, January 10, 2010 (UTC)

The Pail[edit]

If that pail give immortality, whether it is biological, temporary, or tuck everlasting, Bellina will get it.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 01:44, January 11, 2010 (UTC)

re:Fisch[edit]

Well excuse me for preferring a small would over dozens of fractured bones.

Anyways, Fisch needs weaknesses. He can't "not be killed". What I wrote should be good enough, since it would take brute force for any of them to happen. Blood loss? The blood would have to be sucked out of him, due to his healing factor. Being eaten? Seals, orcas, and zombie puffles are of the few known creatures to eat penguins. Fisch doesn't need that much immortality to survive more than the other residents of CP.

Anyways, I'll use the blog.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 03:19, January 11, 2010 (UTC)

A bit more[edit]

Sickness should include malnourishment and fractured bones, so no surviving after being crushed by an anvil for him. Electrocution would be extremely damaging, so a little more than what would kill a normal penguin should be the amount. Decapitation, suffocation, and blood loss would cause his brain not to get oxygen, so that should be able to kill him as well. Also, some poisons should be able to kill him, they just have to be stronger than normal ones and in large quantities since his healing factor would flush them out.

He would still be immune to stab wounds and certain ranges of temperature (nothing crazy like lava), radiation, and acid.

Agree to this and I'll unprotected.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 03:34, January 11, 2010 (UTC)

Actually[edit]

Fisch can't be invincible to brain damage (including his brain being oxygen-deprived), or extreme damage to his whole body (Electrocution, being eaten, burned by lava, etc).

Agree to that and everything will be fine.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 05:25, January 12, 2010 (UTC)

...[edit]

Again with the height? Why do you make them so freakishly tall?

Anyways, a swarm of Zombie puffles could strip Fisch to the bone (although swarms are rare). Leopard Seals could probably take chunks out enough over again for him to have the same fate.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 05:36, January 12, 2010 (UTC)

semiquit[edit]

I won't be so active Anymore due to School Business. Do not worry, I will come at least every Thursday to Edit. When Summer Vacation Comes, this Template Will be removed for GOOD!

Or at least until Summer vacation is over, amirite?

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 03:31, January 15, 2010 (UTC)

RE: Human Article[edit]

Please, just STOP calling me Exxy. It's very annoying.

And no, I can't excuse your article. It's completely unrelated to CP, and we don't really have a need for President Whatever-his-name-is and his mother on the database. Yours Truly, Explorer 767 (This is a link to my talk page. Go figure.) View this template 13:11, January 16, 2010 (UTC)

RE: USSR[edit]

Well... we're not keeping her - I'm not sorry. Better off with a parody. There will be similarities, don't you worry. It will just be less aggressive. -- N-Sig.PNG ¤ (User page!) (The Cookie Master, bow!) 20:16, January 18, 2010 (UTC)

Fisch and senseis[edit]

I was gonna do a story with Fire Sensei (if explroer allows), Sensei, Fisch, Water and Snow sensei, can fisch be in? its gonna be a ninja journy to fidn a ancient sensei deck from the Three Masters. That turn out to jsut be level 2 and 3 cards with cool pictures.

--I miss pufflezzz....(cry) 21:42, January 18, 2010 (UTC)

I'm Sorry[edit]

I'm sorry for the time a yelled at you for the thing that happened with Explorer. While I still am mad at what you said to Explorer, what I did was un-called for. I should have never done it. I'm sorry. --Speeddasher

By the way, I'm not talking about the Swiss why are you so annoying message. I'm talking about the other message. The first message I don't think I messed up on. --Speeddasher

Swiss Ninja's Future[edit]

I was thinking that Griante gets killed by Ninja Wraith and Bellina posions Jessica after Griante is "finished". Also, she should be the one to be heir to the throne, but allows Ninja Wraith to rule since she is busy.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 22:03, January 28, 2010 (UTC)

Could use help.[edit]

Could you help with my fanon? I need help with the articals, Your good at making the flags and your WICKED GOOD at makign the articals, could you assist me? Ill make you sysop (or whatever its called, I dont wanna steal the idea from here). Heres the link, and to code of conduct.

http://earlyclubpenguinantarticfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Code_Of_Conduct

--I miss pufflezzz....(cry) 03:41, January 29, 2010 (UTC)

Iceland[edit]

Hey, which half of Iceland was destroyed: NNE or Happyface State? --Idoreconise (My Talk here!/Moja dyskusja tutaj!) 08:53, February 1, 2010 (UTC)

Snowball Airlines[edit]

To Swiss Ninja,

I think you should lower the amount of fleet in Snowball Airlines, you have way too many fleet, your airline would not have any use for most of them. According to me, with all the fleet you have in yor airline, it would cost more than 12 billion pebbles for all of them! (That's way too much!) So, I'm sorry if I upset you or anything, it's just that airlines shouldn't have too many fleet.

Regards, -- Sanchonachos RULZ!! -- The Maple Leaf Forevah!! 15:25, February 1, 2010 (UTC)

Yale Child's Study[edit]

Are You In It?Im NOT Takeing The Blood Test *Shivers* But My Parents Will.If We Get Enongh Monay To Buy A WII (I Have A DS And A Xbox 360)Its Next Monday & Tuesday.

--MOC THE BENNY SUPORTER 13:30, February 5, 2010 (UTC)

SN future image[edit]

No problem

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 21:27, February 8, 2010 (UTC)

Future st00f[edit]

Alright, I made another blog. You might want to take a peek.

User blog:Mectrixctic/Third Future

Cya

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 19:27, February 16, 2010 (UTC)

RE: In the box[edit]

We've been giving you advice ever since you came here, and you never listened to it.

Please, stop focusing on your characters being involved in huge events. Everyone's tired of it. Just try writing a story abou their normal, everyday lives, without any treasure-finding or power-imbuing or anything like that. Yours Truly, Explorer 767 (String theory is SO last chronon.) View this template 23:46, February 20, 2010 (UTC)


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Iceland[edit]

You try taking it over, and I will personally see to it that Eastshield deletes all of Snowzerland. You should definitely ask HF before doing anything like that. Yours Truly, Explorer 767 (Neutrinos are stalking you...) View this template 04:21, February 27, 2010 (UTC)

Wow, Snowerland is gonna get PWNED. --Corai: The Red Penguin with real hair! (I dare you to listen to Polka, I DARE! 06:13, February 27, 2010 (UTC)

SNfamily in Fashion Police[edit]

I was just wondering if you would let members of the Hochstadt Family be members of the Fashion Police. K, thanks. Ask me if you have any questions.

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 18:48, March 2, 2010 (UTC)

Hey Swiss.[edit]

I see your making those Star Wars articles, and Im impressed! It shard for Star Wars to impress me, literlly.

On to buisance.

Wanna make a Star Wars The Clone Wars Fanon? You would be perfect for a Admin there!

--Corai: The Red Penguin with real hair! (I dare you to listen to Polka, I DARE! 03:41, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

Okayz.

--Corai: The Red Penguin with real hair! (I dare you to listen to Polka, I DARE! 03:45, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

Lord Emperor Kaiser Grand Master of Card Jitsu Grand General Pride of Zuhrich Swiss Ninja[edit]

You can't just take over lands like Iceland and Shiverpool. You also have penguins worshipping you. Here's one thing; stop it and you'll be restored as an egomaniac. You're really starting to annoy me.

Also you can't take over Deushland or Osterreach. Swiss Ninja has a low ecomony. Plus TerraMount will just take it over (they're still at war). -- Firmato per Il Dirigente Conversazione verso Il Dirigente 12:27, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

Swiss, you can't just occupy The Antarctic Peninsula without the community's permission.You've taken over way too many lands now. I agree with The Leader,you have your own cult of personality. -- Sanchonachos RULZ!! -- The Maple Leaf Forevah!! 13:34, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

I like this Swiss guy. I demand he be made BOSSmaster. Z K 14:08, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

If you want the wiki to be sucked into an age of darkness, go ahead, make him a BOSSmaster.-- Sanchonachos RULZ!! -- The Maple Leaf Forevah!! 20:48, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

Once Swiss becomes a BOSS, there's no telling how far the wiki is going to plummet.

Unless, of course, the whole community forces Swiss to abdicate. Yours Truly, Explorer 767 (SUCK UP DIS TORCH!) View this template 20:53, March 6, 2010 (UTC)

thumb|300px|right|My All time favorit song== Notice ==

Swiss,

I have expanded the Snowzerland's Second Reich article into Snowzerland. Please Swiss, for the benefit of users and visitors to the database, DO NOT make any more pages like that. They are called STUBS. You have already made heaps of stubs and if you make any more I'll have to delete some.

If you are having trouble editing, don't hesitate to leave a message on my talk page.

--Sir Kwiksilver of TARDIS-No second chances. I'm that sort of a man. 12:05, March 15, 2010 (UTC)

Polaris[edit]

Hey, Swiss, I'd like Polaris to be cut in half (One part Swiss, One part USA). The Harborfront District, the Pachina Bay and Polaris Point areas. While the Firt Polaris area gets ready to attack Swiss Ninja's Forces in the Polaris Hills(South of Polaris), which Swiss is invading (Parody of the Battle of Vimy Ridge) and is assisted by the FG. -- Sanchonachos:The Captain You are Now Free to move about the Wiki 23:06, March 21, 2010 (UTC)

I won't[edit]

I won't change the map...(I HAVE THE WORST DRAWING SKILLS..)it ends up bad somehow after I change it...-- Sanchonachos:The Captain You are Now Free to move about the Wiki 23:14, March 21, 2010 (UTC)

GSW[edit]

About the GSW and Avatar Warfmech, when the USA "wins" the war, have the Warmech destroyed. This is the most logical way.

USA Troopers shoot snowballs at the legs, jamming the left one up, when it trys to move, it catches aflame. Immobiling the Mech. Then USA soldiers begin trying to rip it apart, after a few peces are missing, the Mech falls into a crouch-like posiition. The pilot escapes and ther Mech self destructs, to keep it out of the USA's hands.

Thats the most logical way. But you can make your own way for it to go boom.


I am Corai. (I am the Inner Circle! IN THE NAME OF KANE!!) 03:12, April 4, 2010 (UTC)

TA DA[edit]

Surray.PNG
Swiss Ninja/2 has got the Corai award! If your lucky, Corai shall give it to you to!

For being a genius.


I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 19:28, April 6, 2010 (UTC)

Convert[edit]

http://clubpenguinfanon.wikia.com/wiki/File:Surray_Metal_hair.xcf

Can you convert that to PNG?


I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 02:17, April 7, 2010 (UTC)

Bann[edit]

So, Corai, how is my defence coming along???? I Miss the Fanon. Am i in the clear?

--Swiss Ninja - I place the Royal Seal on this page - 02:32, April 9, 2010 (UTC)

Annie is ignoring me. ----I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 02:36, April 9, 2010 (UTC)

RE: Request[edit]

>implying you haven't read the message at the top of my talk page.

Oh you! lOl.   http://img188.imageshack.us/img188/1254/lockkey.png  ZoneKill  T C E   05:29, April 9, 2010 (UTC)

GSW3 Idea[edit]

You told me to remind you, so I put it on you're talk page.

Well, here it is:

Swiss Ninja attacks Billybob, so that he could become the Author, and President of Antarctica.
 

KingH10 ;^) DOCTA HOO PWNS! Talk 2 da 1 'n' only...KINGH10! 06:54, April 18, 2010 (UTC)

Good Idea[edit]

Good idea.


I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 14:10, April 19, 2010 (UTC)

I like Orbit. ----I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 14:09, April 20, 2010 (UTC)


From Corai[edit]

It sounds cooler, XD


I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 00:12, April 21, 2010 (UTC)


Good point. ----I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 00:21, April 21, 2010 (UTC)

Viking Empire as a result of GFW[edit]

I was thinking that the Viking Empire could be a country created after GFW. Since there are vikings there, it could be cut off easilier.

What do you think?

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 20:39, April 20, 2010 (UTC)

Okay[edit]

Well, the GSNWI is pretty long, so can you write up a summary or something?

I was thinking that Viking Empire could be in the GFW, as the Ottoman Empire or Romania. If it is Ottoman Empire, it will be on USA side and will be split into some countries at the end. If it is Romania, it will be on the Allie's side and get a little more territory.

click here

Citcxirtcem BAAAAAWW to me! see my 5,676 edits! 04:20, April 23, 2010 (UTC)

Ps. as a side note I was just wondering...

It used to be the Great Fanon War, but Explorer declared the article as not a parody JUST because i didn't add his idea, and after all, i added everyone elses.

  1. How was it a parody?
  2. What was Exy's idea?
  3. What were the other added ideas?

From Corai[edit]

Ye choice, matey!


I am Corai. (Fear me, mortal.) 14:09, April 23, 2010 (UTC)

Pacifica and Orbit Airlines[edit]

So, here is my plan:

Pacifica-Pacifica will be an international airline, and will be the sixth largest airline, it'll be a parody of British Airways. I'll make a logo.

Orbit- Orbit will be like a Virgin America, a low-cost domestic airline.

Here are the current airline parodies:

MammothAir-Delta

Club Penguin AirFlights-American Airlines

Air Antarctic-United Airlines

StarJet-WestJet, JetStar Airways, Southwest Airlines

Polar Airways-Continental

Aer Frysland-Aer Lingus

TransAir-AirTran Airways

Sherby Blue-Virgin Blue

SAIA-LIAT

Snowball Airlines-Air Canada

UTA-Air France

CP Airways-US Airways

CityExpress Airways-Porter Airlines

FlyStar Airways-Hawaiian Airlines


Needed to be made[edit]

Aeroflore-Aeroflot


Tell me what you think!

-- Sanchonachos:The Captain You are Now Free to move about the Wiki 01:42, April 24, 2010 (UTC)

Can 12yz12ab be related to Swiss Ninja?[edit]

(Only from like a century ago you can trace the relation thing) I really want that Sensei State thing for my character and to make my character less mary sue,I will remove his ability to control fire. Or,can it just be that anyone can use the Sensei State thing if they are a hereditary ninja?--12yz12ab Talk to me Edits Contribs 13:32, May 8, 2010 (UTC)

Font Test[edit]

I will test fonts here. --Swiss Ninja - I place the Royal Seal on this page - 03:42, May 10, 2010 (UTC)



--Hi! I am Swiss Ninja!

Swiss Ninja? You there?[edit]

--Dear Club Penguin Team: Hello, I am Jsudsu9988, a former and some-what current Club Penguin player. I have enjoyed Club Penguin throughout my childhood, and it was a great influence to me on my life. Before I state my concern and request, I would like to allow myself to say, “Thank you,” for the hard work and dedication to this game. My friend and I really appreciate this opportunity where we could interact with other penguins, hang out, and feel safe at the same time. Furthermore, thank you for your time and pondering about this fan mail. My concern consists of a website called, “Club Penguin Fanon Wiki.” It is compatible with Wikipedia, but a company called, “Wikia”, owns it. On this Wiki, editors contribute fantasy stories that relate to Club Penguin. Some also are parodies of real life events, people, and places. The issue that I am concerned about is that there is this “tyrant,” or that is what people think of this editor, who will opposes peoples’ thoughts, dreams, and ideas occasionally. This editor’s username on the wiki is Explorer 767. He wants, basically, everything his way, or what the “BOSSes” wants. My friend, who is known as Swiss Ninja in the Wiki, had a story about traveling into the "Real World" for the greatest adventure he has ever thought to be. Please consider going to this link for more information on the story and problems that are currently occurring. http://clubpenguinfanon.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:Swiss_Ninja/It%27s_Been_a_while_since_i_made_a_story. Please feel free to edit, interact, comment, or join Fanon, for this blog post. However, Explorer had many reasons to oppose it. For instance, he uses Realism to determine the fate of Swiss Ninja’s story. He contradicts that penguins should travel around the world. He reason would be because of Heat Stroke. Actually, I have a counterargument that opposes his reasoning. http://penguins.co.nz/?penguinsfaq is the site where it proves that some penguins could migrate limited to the Southern Hemisphere. It states, “However, there are also penguins living in temperate climates such as the Galapagos. No penguins live naturally in the northern hemisphere.” However, Swiss Ninja’s map of his story extends more than the limit, and for I will ask him to limit his trip. This might lessen and prove to Explorer that there is still a chance. Unfortunately, there is this rule called, “The OOC,” which is an acronym for Out of Character. For more information on this rule, please go to the link: http://clubpenguinfanon.wikia.com/wiki/OOC. Explorer stated, “Stated in the OOC policy: ‘Nothing but canon can override continuity.’ Your story isn't canon.” “Canon Authority -- The OOC boundaries set by the real-world online game, Club Penguin, along with merchandise like the DS video game. Users should try to avoid breaking these boundaries at all costs EXCEPT loss of an article's core content” (OCC). My personal response to this would be, “This is absurd…” I would greatly appreciate if you would write a personal response to the Fanon Wiki, and if you could, on your free time, join and interact with the Fanon. Help us spread the word. We would most appreciate if you would accept. Until further notice, please help us. Please allow yourself to get to know the situation at hand. You may help by replying to this e-mail, commenting on the blog post, making an account and demand order to the Fanon, and confirm that you are a real Club Penguin employee and that you are here by the means of Jsudsu9988 to restore this crisis going on with Swiss Ninja. They will not believe unless you edit here: http://clubpenguinfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Club_Penguin_Fanon_Wiki. By this link, edit the General Announcement category, and feel free to type anything you wish, but please do not vandal the page. In these times, we really need a support that can overthrow these harsh laws, like the Canon, and promote more fictional stories, for none of this is deemed to be real. I hope you are siding with us and hope that you will accept this plead for aid. Thank you, again, and please reply, first, to me, as soon as possible. This is Swiss Ninja’s plead for assistance: “I am a very great fan of yours, and I have enjoyed Club Penguin a lot for a while. I also write stories of adventures of Club Penguin on a noble site known as the Club Penguin Fanon Wiki - a whole wiki that makes stories of CP, and where we make many more characters into our own little CP world. Recently, I wanted to make a story about traveling into the "Real World" for the greatest adventure I have ever thought to be. However, my friend, Explorer 767, on the website does not agree with this because of many reasons, but one of the main ones is that the story is going a bit too far and is not related to CP. Nevertheless, the characters that will be traveling are Penguins and Puffles, but I know that CP supports imagination.” – Swiss Ninja

XeXeXe's Sword[edit]

Swiss, the Old English is getting... well, old.

You want to make a deal? Okay then. Limit the story to Antarctica, with no OOCs or policy violations, and I'll never bother it again (for the forseeable future). Like they say, a good compromise leaves everyone unhappy. Yours Truly, Explorer 767   http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100407022512/clubpenguinfanon/images/6/65/Xexexecolor_small.png   (DDD FTW!) View this template 02:31, May 15, 2010 (UTC)

Hi[edit]

Hey Swiss,I saw the picture on Explorer's talk (it's awesome,I must tell you that). But,could you add Gary the Gaget Dude into that? See the picture of him on This arcticle. kthxbai. --I have a stick,and I'm not afraid to use it! Ok,maybe a little.... 12:50, May 15, 2010 (UTC)

Why Piper cannot fly regular aircraft[edit]

Piper, as all Puffles are banned from flying regular aircraft by the FAAA, with no exceptions what-so-ever. Puffles can't reach the yoke, avionics, navigation systems or the steering controls of a regular aircraft. He should have, a specialized plane.The reason why puffles can only fly specialized aircraft is for safety reasons. If a puffle can't reach the systems, than the plane will not move. -- Sanchonachos The Maple Leaf Forever!! 03:30, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

Puffles can't fly regular planes Swiss, it's like making dogs trying to fly as a captain on a Delta Air Lines flight.Puffles, need special planes, and the assistance of a penguin co-pilot before they may use a regular plane. Their telekinesis could toggle with the avionics or navigation systems, it's like a radio wave. If they use telekinesis, it's like letting people talk on their cell phones mid flight. -- Sanchonachos The Maple Leaf Forever!! 21:22, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

He may only be a co-pilot, and can only do radio, avionics systems, and cabin systems, and not the yoke, due to safety concerns. Piper has to have a penguin as a pilot, and cannot fly solo. Piper is the only exception to this, and must pay 700 pebbles to FAAA for doing so. Sanchonachos The Maple Leaf Forever!! 01:39, May 21, 2010 (UTC)

Lady Gaga[edit]

[1]

Emperor Pengvintine[edit]

I got bored, so I actually did a request for once;

Pengvintine.png

Enjoy.   http://img188.imageshack.us/img188/1254/lockkey.png  ZoneKill  T C E   15:57, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

Welcome bakc Hodsacht Canyon![edit]

I restored the Hodsacht Canyon per void reasons (Godmodding), which was not true.


Enjoy.


I am Corai.MY HEADS NOT BIG! 03:56, May 26, 2010 (UTC)

EAT BLUE BOSSES[edit]


EAT BLUE FINAL BOSSES!


They have one-hit-KO attacks! Yours Truly, Explorer 767   http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100407022512/clubpenguinfanon/images/6/65/Xexexecolor_small.png   (DON'T TOUCH MY DAFFODILS!) View this template 02:10, May 28, 2010 (UTC)

Cast for the Quest for Fisch.[edit]

  • Main Characters
  • Swiss Ninja Hochstadt-A ruler looking for his brother, Fisch.
  • Fisch Hochstadt-A terrified Snowzerland refugee who is fleeing for Fisch.
  • Explorer 767 Antics-A cheerful and happy fourth wall breaker.
  • Secondary Characters
  • Austin8310 Devecter-Swiss Ninja's friend, accomplice, helper, tagalong, and (mostly) completely loyal to him.
  • Piper J. Cub-Yilk's puffle. An adventurous, brave, and somewhat outgoing pilot.
  • Jock Hochstadt-Swiss Ninja's cousin, a Viking Penguin ruler.
  • Yilk Hochstadt-Swiss Ninja's grandfather who was recently rescued. He upholds morals, but sticks to things of the past.
  • Clovis Hochstadt-A jester cousin of Swiss Ninja. He is usually happy and upbeat.
  • David Hochstadt-Another relative of Swiss Ninja. He is a EPF agent.
  • Corai Unki-Swiss Ninja's cowardly cousin, who is generally comic relief.

This accurate?--Austin8310-HIYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAAA! 01:07, June 13, 2010 (UTC)

No Speaky.[edit]

Just would like to inform you that I speak neither FRENCH,SPANISH,OR GERMAN.- ITS DANGEROUS TO GO ALONE! TAKE THISKitteh Guardian.png YOU RECEIVE KITTEH! 23:44, June 20, 2010 (UTC)

Something for you[edit]

Just watch the video. http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100619172820/clubpenguinfanon/images/a/af/Gyarakarp.gif Your friend Talk to your friend See your friend's contributions View your friend's template 17:43, June 21, 2010 (UTC)

RE: Your quote[edit]

My quote isn't gold. Your total inability to flame me is. Yours Truly, Explorer 767   http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100407022512/clubpenguinfanon/images/6/65/Xexexecolor_small.png   (Dream of an Icy Sea... with laser jellyfish on the side.) View this template 00:34, June 26, 2010 (UTC)


P.S. Not to mention your total lack of common sense. Well, maybe not total.

RE:Vacation[edit]

It's a maybe. I have cousins in San Marcos, so I'll probably have to ask my parents. I'll be going from Buffalo Airport to Phoenix Airport, on a nonstop flight on Southwest Airlines. I might drive 8 hours to San Diego from Sedona (AZ), staying at a five-star, all-inclusive resort there. I think I'm going there in August maybe. -- Sanchonachos The Maple Leaf Forever!! 14:56, June 26, 2010 (UTC)

Thoughts on this?[edit]

Chapter One[edit]

Austin slowly walked up to the front gate of the Keukenhof Castle. Swiss Ninja had invited him there for a whole week.

Austin knocked on the door, and it slowly creaked open. In the entrance were two Snoss guards. They escorted him to the main door, in the building. He now saw that there was an external wall he had just passed through. Cautiously, the guard put him through a scanner, and let him in.


Swiss Ninja ran to Austin.

Swiss: "Oh! Hi Austin!” You arrived just in time for breakfast!

Austin: "Yup." It’s nice to see you. I’m starving, that airline was miserable.”

Austin sat down at the large table with Swiss Ninja. Also in the room was Maddieworld, Swiss Ninja’s wife, and Red River 2, Swiss Ninja’s father. Bellina was also sitting in the room, playing chess with Jsudsu.

Austin: “Hi, guys. Yawn."

Maddieworld glared at Austin. Apparently, she wasn’t accustomed to having Khanz and Bounty Hunters in her kitchen.

Austin: "Hey! You!” Get me some food! I’m starving.”

Swiss: “Sorry, darling, Austin’s a Khanz. He doesn’t know what manners are.”

Austin: "Hey!"

He slammed his fish on the table.

Swiss: ”Uhh…yeah.”

Red River stood up and spoke into Swiss Ninja’s ear.

Swiss Ninja: “Yeah, I have to go and discuss war strategies with Red River.”

Austin leaned back, putting his feet on the table.

“Fine with me.”

He sat back in his chair, put both elbows on the table, and when the food came, he ate it with his bare hands.

Austin: “Wow. I don’t see why Swiss just doesn’t go He didn’t see Maddieworld sneaking up behind him with the frying pan.

“Here’s your food, barbaric, loathsome, and disgusting Pengolian.

Austin turned around and was nailed in the face with the frying pan, effectively knocking him out and sending him sprawling. Maddieworld grinned and walked off, with Bellina laughing.

When Swiss Ninja came back in the room, he was pretty surprised.

‘’Two hours later…’’

Austin awoke in a bed.

Austin: “unhh…don’t…frying pan…ow.”

Swiss: “You were found knocked out on the floor with a frying pan in your hand.”

Austin: “Maddieworld hit me with a frying pan.”

Swiss laughed, and told Austin he was being silly. After all, why would Maddieworld want to bang him with a frying pan?

Austin: “I’m telling you, it was her. Ah, whatever. Hmff. She’ll pay.

Chapter Two: The Attic[edit]

Swiss walked into Austin's room. He had recovered fairly quickly, because being hit with a frying pan isn't a wound.

However, right after that, everyone left except Bellina to a ball. Austin hated dancing, so he decided not to go. Bellina couldn't really dance with an arm cannon. He walked into a side room, and started watching television.

Snowzerland Reporter: "Live news! A convict has escaped from Pen Chi Island and is armed. He is heading toward the Snowzerland Castle!

Austin: "I wonder who it is..."

Suddenly, the door behind him locked.

Austin:"Hey!"

He tried to ram the door open. Once...twice...

Finally, it cracked open, and the door exploded outward. Suddenly, in the hall, there was somebody behind him...

It was Jsudsu with a knicicle.

Austin relaxed.

"Oh. Hi, Jsudsu. Why didn't you go to the ball?"

"Tax forms. Swiss Ninja. You know..."

Austin remembered the time he did Swiss Ninja's taxes. It took over 4 hours.

"Say, why're you holding the knicicle?

Jsudsu shuddered.

"We're near THE ATTIC."

Austin:"The...attic? What's so bad about that?"

Jsudsu: Let me tell you the tale of the...attic. It was 1850. Swiss Ninja's ancestor lived here. However...he kept the dungeon upstairs. Eventually, one day, he put several High Penguins up there. They easily escaped and bewitched the place. Anyone who goes in gets lifted by a jet of water and thrown into the pond...and in that pond...

Austin:"Yes?"

Jsudsu: Everyone simply dissapears. It's like the Hash List Slinging Slasher of Redlink...Saint Ninjinians Telenacle.

Austin started laughing.

"THAT TELENACLE? LOL! I went in there and vandalized some of it. Heh. Got some glass as a souvineer."

Jsudsu: How about you go upstairs then?

Austin slowly walked up the stairs. When he entered the attic, there was a mysterious black figure in there. Austin yelled and ran backwards. He then slipped and fell out the window into Swiss Ninja's lake.

Austin: $%^@%$#!@^#$%!!!

Jsudsu was laughing. He had set the whole thing up. The mysterous black figure was a coathanger with a shirt on it, and he had greased the area near the window. Of course, Austin didn't know that. Ever since, Austin has been afraid of the Keukenhof Castle's attic.

Swiss Ninja, come on IRC...[edit]

I need to ask a couple of things on #wikia-CPFW. --Jacob W. Too Talk to me or me! 02:38, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

What infobox would I use for a company?[edit]

Is there even one? --Jacob W. Too Talk to me or me! 02:55, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

Happy Too[edit]

Is it high quality yet, would you say? --Jacob W. Too Talk to me or me! 03:40, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

Involvement[edit]

What do I put under 'Involvement'? --Jacob W. Too Talk to me or me! 04:22, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

Your image contest.[edit]

Where is it? Yours PWNingly, KingH10 ;^) Life's confusing. My goal is to make it even more confusing. My Blogs! Play KingH10's Favourite Online Game! 06:10, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

May Vickers Vanguard Join the Hochstadt Gang?[edit]

Hi Swiss Ninja, I have recently made a character, Vickers Vanguard. Maybe he can be Piper J. Cub's friend, while on the adventures. I plan for Vickers to leave home, and set out on his own. He joins the Hochstadt gang and accompanies them on adventures. Vickers can specialize in computers and fixing things. -- Sanchonachos The Maple Leaf Forever!! 21:46, July 14, 2010 (UTC)

RE: Despicable Me[edit]

Hmm... that could be BOSS XeXeXe's theme if it weren't for the fact that he already has King Dedede's Theme... maybe he can have two.

BTW, someone's pretty irked today. You must have been if you say that fits me well. Yours Truly, Explorer 767 (ALL HAIL THE FRIENDLY GIANT MUSHROOM) View this template 02:59, July 17, 2010 (UTC)

Suggestions for your stories[edit]

Hey Swiss, I like your stories, but I've spotted some problems.

  • One. REDUNDANT PLOT DEVICES. RDA helicopters storming in that don't do anything. A giant energy ball that doesn't get shot.
  • Two. No challenges for the Hochstadt Gang. They burn through EVERY SINGLE enemy in the story with ease. Nobody even gets hurt. Give them a challenge.
  • Three. Fight Scenes. I hate to say this, but your fight scenes are MISERABLE. You go into NO DETAIL, don't describe enemies getting hurt (which is sometimes good and sometimes not), and only the bad guys get beaten up.
  • Four. Character personalization. Sorry, but sometimes your characters are...generic. Corai is scared. That's it. Explorer's just...there. Nothing else. He says random stuff. That's not right. Explorer stands out! He's the life of the crowd. Dave hasn't gotten any attention, Clovis is generally ignored, and Jock rarely gets the limelight. It's basically Piper, Fisch, and Fuut-Ga.
  • Five. Character Interaction. Normally, it's just one or two characters talking. You should have each character speak, and with personalized comments. And the conversations aren't...real. Too serious. Clovis and Explorer would probably interuppt a lot.
  • Six. Pathetic Enemies. Great Viking War was ended by a speech. Same with GSWIII. GSWI was really anti-climatic. Pen Chi's hideout was UNDER A ROCK. Quest for Yilk, they had NO PROBLEM going past Swiss and his army. Quest for Fisch...same.
  • Seven. Anti-Climatic Endings. Seriously? Most of your endings tend to be a little boring and anti-climatic, I'd work on that.
  • Eight. They work great together. The Hochstadt Gang rarely hinders itself, though Fisch and Explorer wouldn't get along, Piper and Akbaboy don't get along, Clovis wouldn't go well with Serious Buisness Fuut-Ga, and Corai barely ever says anything.
  • Nine. Too many characters! The Hochstadt Gang is almost 12 people now.
  • Ten. Short Chapters. Bro, your earlier stories had WAY more chapters. Now they only have five or six.


Just sayin, y'know? --Austin8310-YA-HIHIHIHIHIHI!!!-Lit. 23:45, July 18, 2010 (UTC)


Re:FOOL![edit]

Note: Underlined text is my input. Yours Truly, Explorer 767 (OBEY YOUR PROPELLER LORD! MWAHAHA) View this template

Bold text is my input. --Austin8310-YA-HIHIHIHIHIHI!!!-Lit. 19:23, July 20, 2010 (UTC) Yeah, Mr. High Expectations. Here's My Answers.

  • One. REDUNDANT PLOT DEVICES. RDA helicopters storming in that don't do anything. A giant energy ball that doesn't get shot.

A:WRONG! The RDA Helicopters where attacking the enemy the whole time. The Energy Ball was going to be shot until Pen chi teleported them away.

RE: Not really. No description. Whatsoever.

It still seems like a poorly-executed plot device... if Pen Chi can just teleport them away like that, why have them attack him in the first place? It doesn't seem to have any effect on later events in the story, so it's mainly pointless.

  • Two. No challenges for the Hochstadt Gang. They burn through EVERY SINGLE enemy in the story with ease. Nobody even gets hurt. Give them a challenge.

A:I Don't like injuring my characters. I have experienced pain in my life, so I don't like going there. Besides, Fuut Ga was nearly Blown UP in the Mystery of Pen Chi, and you're still not happy? SHAME!

RE: Pain's a good thing. (Sort of.) Makes you stronger. And he didn't get blown up. Most of the injuries should be MINOR. Like bruises and cuts.

Pain helps the readers sympathize with characters. No one cares about a bunch of dudes who can ka-pow their way through anything -- boring story. You need some variety, here.


  • Three. Fight Scenes. I hate to say this, but your fight scenes are MISERABLE. You go into NO DETAIL, don't describe enemies getting hurt (which is sometimes good and sometimes not), and only the bad guys get beaten up.

A:I'm too busy or caught up in something else than to rather go into detail. I hate Blood and Gore. Especially gore. Like before, I dont like writing about pain.

RE: I don't use blood and gore! See The Mystery of Pen Chi#Chapter 6: The Battle on the Ridge! Just bruises and smacking. Nobody gets seriously hurt, but it was a good battle.

What Austin said. "Fight scenes" does not mean blood and gore. It means people FIGHTING.

  • Four. Character personalization. Sorry, but sometimes your characters are...generic. Corai is scared. That's it. Explorer's just...there. Nothing else. He says random stuff. That's not right. Explorer stands out! He's the life of the crowd. Dave hasn't gotten any attention, Clovis is generally ignored, and Jock rarely gets the limelight. It's basically Piper, Fisch, and Fuut-Ga.

A:WRONG AGAIN FOOL. Jock has contributed A LOT to my stories. He led the Gang when Fisch was Missing back in the Quest for Fisch, and is the Master of Piper. Fuut Ga is still a brand new character, so you can't judge him on that yet. Jock is going to be the Main character for the GSWIV.

RE: That's not the main problem. Piper REALLY annoys me. He's just...not believable.

Meh. I haven't read into the details of your character dialogue, but what I do know is that it's not getting me interested in anything. They're talking like they would over the coffee table. Also, you DO get Explorer wrong. It's not uber-OOC, but it's not like him to just stand there and make bland comments.

  • Five. Character Interaction. Normally, it's just one or two characters talking. You should have each character speak, and with personalized comments. And the conversations aren't...real. Too serious. Clovis and Explorer would probably interuppt a lot.

A:Wrong. The Gang makes plenty of Jokes....usually coming from Clovis. Plus, the Gang seems to always talk.

RE: You don't use Explorer properly. And you ignore Corai (sometimes) and some others.

YES. When Explorer's in a group, there's lots of opportunities for comedy. Don't let him stand there, have him make a series of sarcastic or hurtful remarks and let the words (or fists) fly. (Keep it lighthearted.) Just some advice.

  • Six. Pathetic Enemies. Great Viking War was ended by a speech. Same with GSWIII. GSWI was really anti-climatic. Pen Chi's hideout was UNDER A ROCK. Quest for Yilk, they had NO PROBLEM going past Swiss and his army. Quest for Fisch...same.

A:I thought it would be funny to have the gang find Pen Chi hiding in a Cave that's covered by a rock.

RE: Not really funny. And that's not on the Pathetic Enemies subject.

Funny, yes (slightly), but the OOC outweighs the humor, seeing as he's the best Ninja Master in the world. He should have a more remote hideout -- one harder to get to. Throw a cliff climb or a paddle across treacherous rapids into the journey.


  • Seven. Anti-Climatic Endings. Seriously? Most of your endings tend to be a little boring and anti-climatic, I'd work on that.

A:Nothing to say here. Be more Specific, fool.

<sarcasm>RE: Since you have nothing to say, YOU FOOL! STOP CALLING ME FOOL! </sarcasm>

FOOL! ONLY THE PROPELLER LORD MAY CALL FOOLS "FOOL", FOOL! LISTEN TO ME, YOU LOWLY FOOL, FOOL! FOOL! (On a more serious note, he's kind of right. GSWI ended with Swiss being defeated by a sudden outburst of protests that seemed all too abrupt to be true. But you do have a point, Austin needs specific examples.)

  • Eight. They work great together. The Hochstadt Gang rarely hinders itself, though Fisch and Explorer wouldn't get along, Piper and Akbaboy don't get along, Clovis wouldn't go well with Serious Buisness Fuut-Ga, and Corai barely ever says anything.

A:Again, this question is Folly. This is the HOCHSTADT GANG. I don't think you know what a Gang is if you don't have teamwork. Yes, they argue, (I have made that happen, fool), but Everyone has to SET ASIDE their differences and help out. This is how Society should be. Well, it should be, but Society is all folly...

RE: Gang's often don't teamwork perfectly like they do in the stories. Ever had a group project? They don't work that well. Soloing the project is more effective and better. Groups often argue. And the Hochstadt Gang doesn't. Swiss isn't a mary sue. The Hochstadt Gang is.

That's how every gang in a story works, fool Swiss. They may utilize teamwork, but there's still tension between some of the members, and sometimes conflict will break out. It makes stories more interesting when you split the protagonists' team due to conflict.

  • Nine. Too many characters! The Hochstadt Gang is almost 12 people now.

A:The More the Merrier. You and everyone else are so paranoid of having TOO MUCH PEOPLE. There is NEVER ENOUGH Boss, or whatever. BOSS make this place a better one! ACHEIVEMENT FOOL! ACHIEVEMENT!

RE: Too many cooks in the kitchen often burn their butts. Or spoils the recipe. You get the idea.

He's right. Too many BOSS and we'd be having a bunch of wars over every possible administrative function (e.g., blocking, protection, deletion, promotion, editing/maintenance, etc.)

  • Ten. Short Chapters. Bro, your earlier stories had WAY more chapters. Now they only have five or six.

A:I usually do this on purpose either because I have nothing to write or that I want to rush to a new story.

RE: Don't rush. It makes your stories worse.

Yes, yes it does. But don't make your stories too long, either.

Oh, and by the way, I WANTED Pen Chi to be Captured.

RE: TS and Explorer said no.

It should remain as-is. Besides, he'd escape pretty quickly, anyway.

But NO, you had to continue it after I was going to move on to another story!!!!!!

@$#%^^&*!!!

RE: That's really mature.

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